O Weeping Willow
please cry for me ~ love has flown
I weep 'neath your tree !
Symbol of England
O the mighty Oak ~ but now
England has gone broke !
My sweet Apple Tree
your blossom and your fruit ~ is
very sweet to me
Love to be Poplar
tall and slim ~ makes the Italian
landscape ~ neat and trim
Thanks for reading ~ comments welcome ~ love BRIAN
I love all trees and like to relate to them !
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BRIANSODES (Pseudonym) (
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- Comment from author about the poem: I love HAIKU and all things natural make wonderful HAIKU ~ Love BRIAN
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So beautifully written.
- Shahla Latifi
Thanks SHAHLA ~ much appreciated. I always like to make my HAIKU 5 7 5 and also introduce a bit of rhyme. Thanks BRIAN
Wonderful Haiku Brian, Each one a different tree and each one beautifully portrayed...I am blessed to live near a forest and spend a lot of time walking it at weekends....The tree's are so beautiful and the scents divine.. last Haiku 5/9/5 is this another form of the Haiku and can we use either form when writing one ? Love them all...Smiles and blessings...Dee.
Thanks DEE ~ for an encouraging comment ~ I am pleased it resonated with you ! Love your picture ! I pronounced IT - ALIAN as only having TWO syllables when it has at last three ! I love HAIKU and I think there is a lot of hype about that an English HAIKU must have a 5 7 5 syllabus pattern. In essence it does not matter ! Perhaps 3 lines and 17 syllables would give poetic licence. Technically they should not rhyme either. Lots of HAIKU on MPS are not 5 7 5 ~ for me the verbal content and the message are more important that the syllabic structure. I could have used ITI which (I believe) was a derogatory term used for Italians in WW2 ITIS ~ OK ~ But most people would not have understood it. I should have been iconoclastic in HAIKU 3 and written the first line as I SHOULD HAVE BEEN A POPLAR ~ I did not want to offend the HAIKU-POLICE ! As you might imagine the rules for Japanese Haiku are much more rigid in both form and structure. Incidentally if a HAIKU is not about nature it is called a SENRYU and is still 5 7 5 An exanple would be Boris Johnson a ~ Tory Clown Gove said no good ~ Boris then stood down ! That is a SENRYU because it is about a person and not nature ~ OK ~ Blessings to you too ~ Love BRIAN
sorry, but this isn't a haiku.
A haiku is three verses, no more no less.
The key is to tell a story/set a scene in small and simple words.
THANKS FOR YOU COMMENT JADE. This is not ONE HAIKU ~ this is four separate HAIKU each of which (individually) fulfills the criteria for an English Haiku 17 syllables ~ in three lines of 5~7~5 syllables OK ~ Yours BRIAN
Okay, thanks for the explanation, Its still a good poem,
I am sorry if I appeared aggressive
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