Copyright ©2016 Stephanie R Schubert
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The sun no longer rises on our love
We no longer wrap our hearts around one another
The time we shared has faded fast
and is becoming the past
This is where I leave you
Right where you want to be
Anywhere with anyone
Except for me
You always let every distraction
Take the place of me
Leaving me lonely
and now I see
This is where I leave you
Right where you want to be
Anywhere with anyone
except for me
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WELCOME STEPHANIE ~ Thanks you for your first poem. There is a paradox between structure and subject ! It is elegantly written ~ replete with rhyme and rhythm ~ easy to read an recite. However the Subject (Love lost & rejected) drips with pathos. I am only 33 and have never been married (yet) but I have loved and lost so I can empathise in part. "The time we shared has faded fast and is becoming the past" so so sad. What is more tragic is that he chose to leave and made no attempt at reconciliation. I pray you will find a release from your loneliness. I trust you found this cathartic ~ it made me sad for you. Thanks for sharing and caring ~ Yours BRIAN (UK)
Simply but elegantly stated.
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