Soman Ragavan

\"The singing stream\" ; 10 July, 2023

Poem : \'The singing stream\' ; 3 April, 2023.

3 May, 2023
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Poem : “The singing stream” 

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Soman Ragavan : My poem : \"The singing stream.\" Please analyse by each stanza, then give overall comments. Mention similar poems from other authors, where possible. THE SINGING STREAM

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Sure, Soman Ragavan. Here\'s my analysis of your poem \"The Singing Stream\" by stanza:


Stanza 1: The first stanza sets the scene and introduces the two girls who are on their way to the stream with the family\'s washing. The description of their movements creates a joyful and lively mood.


Stanza 2: In this stanza, the girls start their washing dance, and the description of their movements becomes more detailed and energetic. The imagery of their \"sensuous hips pumping\" and \"swinging and swaying\" adds a playful and sensual element to the poem.


Stanza 3: The focus shifts to the stream and its surroundings. The description of the girls thrashing the sheets on the rocks and the imagery of the \"whitish rocks near the bank\" paints a vivid picture of the scene.


Stanza 4: The sudden appearance of the tiny fish and their nibbling at the girls\' feet adds a surprising and delightful twist to the poem. The description of the girls\' reaction to the fish adds to the joyful and ecstatic mood of the poem.


Stanza 5: The final stanza describes the continuous flow of the stream and its song, which will continue throughout the night until dawn. The use of the word \"gorgeous\" to describe the stream\'s song adds a positive and uplifting note to the poem.


Overall, \"The Singing Stream\" is a beautifully descriptive and lively poem that captures the joy and beauty of a simple scene in nature. The use of vivid imagery and sensory details brings the scene to life, and the shift in focus from the girls to the stream adds depth to the poem. The sudden appearance of the fish adds a delightful surprise, and the final stanza provides a sense of continuity and timelessness.


In terms of similar poems from other authors, \"The Singing Stream\" reminds me of William Wordsworth\'s \"Lines Written Above Tintern Abbey,\" which also captures the beauty and serenity of a natural scene. The use of nature to convey joy and beauty is a common theme in both poems.
 
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\"THE  SINGING  STREAM.\" Refers to the period around 1971. At Ébène, Belle Rose, Mauritius.
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                          THE  SINGING  STREAM

What a scene ! The two girls, slim and youthful,
Do saunter sweetly down the lane to yon stream,
With the family\'s washing, of which a good baleful,
Perch\'d ‘pon their heads --- how joyful they seem !

Each girl to her own stone waddles lightly :
And they both start their exciting dance;
What a sight : how they move sprightly !
Swinging and swaying, how they prance !

Dipping the clothes into the running water,
Now and then they let out some laughter;
To and fro their sensuous hips pumping,
They make the lather go on frothing.

The stream amid the rocks doth meander,
While the girls stand in the clear water,
Thrashing out the sheets, heavy and wet,
On the whitish rocks near the bank set.

Suddenly, the two girls let out a joyous shriek :
A myriad of tiny fish, emerging from yon creek,
Suddenly be biting at their feet under the water.
The thrilling feeling : what an ecstatic shudder !

At the feet under the water
A myriad fish nibble away;
The lips heavenly suck and play
Sending the girls in some tremor.

The stream keeps on flowing,
Hammering out of the reeds
Some song, sweet and soothing,
Enjoy\'d even by the bending weeds.

All night long will go on the gorgeous song,
In the creeping darkness or in moonshine,
But, now heard only by yon swimming throng,
Until dawns a new day, with the sunshine.
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