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Poem : “The scream”
Soman Ragavan : Hello. Can I post a poem of mine for analysis, please ?
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Soman Ragavan : My poem : \"The scream.\" This poem is about how some slaves were treated in Mauritius, including branding with hot irons for having escaped from captivity. Please analyse by each stanza, then give overall comments. Mention similar poems from other authors, where possible. THE SCREAM
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Your poem \"The Scream\" is a powerful and moving work that effectively captures the brutality and horror of the treatment of slaves in Mauritius.
In the first stanza, you establish the central character as a runaway slave who has chosen to escape from captivity. The second stanza highlights the cruel treatment he faced at the hands of his masters, who denied him even basic human dignity. The third stanza depicts the chase to capture the slave, and the final stanza describes the branding with a hot iron, a barbaric punishment that the slave must endure.
Your use of imagery and sensory details is particularly effective in conveying the pain and suffering of the slave. The comparison to the free birds in stanza two emphasizes the stark contrast between the slave\'s captivity and the freedom that others enjoy. The image of the hot iron in stanza five is especially visceral and disturbing, and the description of the slave\'s scream in the final stanza is haunting.
Overall, your poem is a powerful condemnation of the inhumane treatment of slaves, and a reminder of the terrible injustices that have been perpetrated throughout history.
One poem that comes to mind that explores similar themes is \"The Slave\'s Dream\" by Henry Wadsworth Longfellow. In this poem, a slave dreams of a life of freedom and happiness, only to wake up to the reality of his captivity. Like your poem, \"The Slave\'s Dream\" is a powerful condemnation of slavery and a reminder of the terrible toll it took on those who were forced to endure it.
Soman Ragavan : Thank you. Goodbye for now.
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POEM :
THE SCREAM
(References to newspapers in Mauritius)
(1) At some mountain tops from where some slaves jumped, the sea was a little distance off.
(2) Some other references :
(a) \"La traite négrière : Les vues de Ladebat, Clarkson et Buxton.\" (Two parts).
(b) Articles by J. L. Chan Low in \"5-PLUS DIMANCHE\" newspaper, Mauritius :
1 \"Récits de marrons.\" 31 March, 1996, (page 19).
2 \"Combat à mort.\" 7 April, 1996, (page 19).
3 \"Le récit de marrons. Contre les marrons : une lutte impitoyable.\" 14 April, 1996, (page 19).
4 \"Récits de marrons. Répression du marronage : Le code légal.\" 21 April, 1996, (page 19).
5 \"Récits de marrons. Adoucissements des peines ?\" 28 April, 1996, (page 19).
6 \"Récits de marrons. Les détachements.\" 5 May, 1996, (page 19).
7 \"Récits de marrons. Chasseurs de noirs.\" 26 May, 1996, (page 19); 2 June, 1996, (page 19).
8 \"Récits de Marrons. Les Mutins de la Liberté\" : 9 June, 1996, (page 19); 16 June, 1996, (page 19); 23 June, 1996, (page 19); 30 June, 1996, (page 19); 7 July, 1996, (page 19); 14 July, 1996, (page 15); 21 July, 1996, (page 19); 28 July, 1996, (page 19); 4 August, 1996, (page 19); 11 August, 1996, (page 19).
9 \"Récits de marrons. L\'Homme noir des bois.\" 18 August, 1996, (page 19); 25 August, 1996, (page 19); 1 September, 1996, (page 19); 8 September, 1996, (page 19); 15 September, 1996, (page 19); 22 September, 1996, (page 19).
(c) \"Premier volet d\'une trilogie pour tracer la mémoire de l\'écrit. \" \"WEEK-END\" newspaper, 2 June, 1996, (page 31).
(d) \"Du Code Noir aux Libertés.\" \"Le MAURICIEN\" newspaper, 11 November, 1996, (page 7).
(e) \"En marge du 162e anniversaire de l\'abolition de l\'esclavage.\" \"L\'EXPRESS\" newspaper, 21 January, 1997, (page 8).
(f) \"La traite négrière à l\'interieur du continent africain.\" \"L\'EXPRESS\" newspaper, 21 January, 1997, (page 8).
(g) \"Ces chaines dans la nuit.\" Article by J. L. Chan Low in \"MILITANT ACTUEL\" newspaper, Mauritius, 31 January to 6 February, 1997, (pages 4 and 22).
(h) \"Les descendants des esclaves furent l\'objet d\'un génocide social au 19e siècle.\" \"MILITANT ACTUEL\" newspaper, 31 January to 6 February, 1997, (pages 10 and 11).
(i) John H. Harris : \"PORTUGUESE SLAVERY : BRITAIN\'S DILEMMA.\" London : Methuen & Co. Ltd., June 1913. (First published May 1913).
(j) \"Esclavage et séquelles : thème d\'un symposium du conseil municipal de Curepipe.\" \"WEEK-END\" newspaper, 16 February, 1997, (page 23).
(k) \"Benjamin Moutou nous parle de l\'esclavage.\" \"PASSERELLE\" newspaper, Mauritius, January 1997, Number 2, (pages 6 and 7)
(l) \"L\'esclavagisme et le colonialisme sont des crimes contre l\'Humanité.\" \"Le MAURICIEN\" newspaper, 7 August, 2001, (page 8).
(3) On \"THE SCREAM,\" please see \"MISÈRE NOIRE,\" (page 29); on \"THE LAPPING WAVES,\" please see \"MISÈRE NOIRE,\" (page 26). Suresh Mourba : \"MISÈRE NOIRE.\" (Printed by Bahadoor Printing, Port Louis, Mauritius, 1990).
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POEM :
THE SCREAM
Runaway. The status he had chosen :
The option \'pon which he had fallen;
A runaway slave roam\'d the forest :
Under a tree slump’d he down to rest.
No more could he stand that barbarity,
That vile cruelty refin\'d with novelty,
That savagery inflict\'d \'pon him incessantly :
A human treatment was he denied blatantly.
Freely flew the birds, God\'s good creatures,
Enjoying in this life all the goodly pleasures;
How the man wish\'d he were like yon bird :
Long lost, now his wish would be heard.
Tasteless grasses he ate, rain water he drank,
Deer he chas\'d, until, exhaust\'d, down he sank;
A living monument was he to savage slavery :
How his tormentors relish\'d their infamy !
What a life, that of a slave runaway !
A mere fire could quickly give him away :
A hot lunch could well be his last meal :
How around him anxious looks did he steal !
* * *
The chase was on : the slave had been spott\'d :
The hordes rac\'d on, with appetite augment\'d :
What a creature, this sly, two-legg\'d beast :
How would he provide an exciting feast !
Against the poor slave the odds were stack\'d.
His tir\'d body he dragg\'d. His feet felt slack\'d.
The yells grew louder, as wearily again he back\'d.
Finally, down to his last refuge he\'d been track\'d.
A myriad greedy eyes at him shone voraciously :
How the forlorn man stagger\'d about piteously !
The wildest chase in nature had culminat\'d :
The runaway slave had finally capitulat\'d.
Like a wild beast, he had been corner\'d :
His whole body was bruis\'d and batter\'d;
Man hath to savour his victory to the full :
No, he cares not that his prey tearful.
The slave would be march’d, tied up, chain\'d :
His last strength from him would be drain\'d;
He would taste the most wick\'d punishment :
Some vicious visitation as only Man could invent.
* * *
A myriad sparks from the flames flew :
Yet, harder at the fire the men blew;
In the fire, red glow\'d the iron, as red could be :
The “justiciers” had embark\'d \'pon another spree.
A dozen traitors pinn\'d down the slave :
Yet, they thought of themselves as brave;
For days the slave had suffer\'d from hunger :
Yet, the iron was turn\'d redder and redder.
No scene could give the animals more pleasure :
Infinitely more decent was yon waiting vulture;
The fire glow\'d, and the men\'s eyes glow\'d :
Into their foulest depths, the fiends burrow\'d.
Lo, lo ! The hot iron they pull\'d out and grabb\'d :
The slave\'s sweating shoulder suddenly they stabb\'d !
A thundering cry rang out, and tore the entire valley :
Victoriously had been brand\'d the yelling prey.
For others, a fire cook\'d some juicy and delicious meat :
The meat \'pon the man\'s shoulder smart\'d from the heat;
Brand\'d was he, like cattle, to punish his elusion :
Brand\'d was he, like bulls, by his masters\' decision.
Of a fire he had dreamt in the forest :
Now, of fires, he tast\'d the fiercest;
He roast\'d in his own juices, for others to see :
Such spectacles gave the fiends the greatest glee.
The scream echo\'d and echo\'d endlessly :
The assembly laugh\'d heartily, callously;
\'Pon the screaming man, a scorching lily :
In his very soul suffer’d he blazingly.
From the burning iron his shoulder was sore :
The excit\'d hounds shout\'d for an \"encore\" !....
No other feast could give them more pleasure :
Such scorching irons avidly did they treasure.
Brand\'d was the runaway :
Brand\'d for having run away;
He would run away no longer, no more :
\'Pon his sore shoulder a mark he bore.
Nothing like that chilling cry,
As yon dark shoulder did fry;
Mighty Man need\'d a thrilling joy :
How well execut\'d he his cruel ploy !
* * *
That was the justice of the slave owner :
That was the punishment of the master :
That was the treatment of the civilis\'d :
The hands that brand\'d shalt be paralys\'d !
Slaves they own\'d, just as they own\'d plantations :
\'Pon what were found\'d their title deeds, we wonder;
What right had Man to capture and sell his brother ?
Still remain unanswer\'d today many such questions.
The marks have gone, along with the brand\'d bodies :
But, forever shalt be remember\'d those steak parties;
To dust have return\'d the irons and the “justiciers” :
But, the scream doth still echo amid yon glaciers.
Many wish this past were rather forgotten :
But, we’ll remind them of yon flesh molten;
They might even deny all this ever exist\'d :
But, of what better their justice consist\'d ?
Even if our accounts were to be contest\'d,
Of those burnt steaks would they be remind\'d;
Up their noses again we\'ll fling that smell :
That smell \'pon which our poetry shalt dwell.
* * *
Yon cry ! Yon cry in the valleys resounds still :
Yon cry encircling still yon boisterous sugar mill;
For his flight the poor slave was brand\'d :
Now by us the fiends shalt be confront\'d.
Wriggle as they might, they would now be brand\'d :
Blazing hot be our poetry, as it recalls yon cry;
All those murderers finally our poetry will try :
All their excuses by us totally shalt be blast\'d.
The slave-owners sank into their lowest treachery :
The worst ravages were wrought here by slavery;
A glaring mark was left by the scorching lily :
Red-hot was the iron, white-hot be our poetry.
Yon cry ! \'Pon the poor man was a lily engrav\'d :
Into his shoulder was the hot iron coldly driven;
In vain all those dangers daringly had he brav\'d :
From the blistering iron was his shoulder swollen.
From that howling cry hath been born this poetry :
By God, we will remember forever that bloody lily…..
Dripping with gore was the maul\'d man\'s shoulder :
\'Pon that charr\'d flesh we will make many ponder.
In their own history they engrav\'d their infamy :
Their crimes shalt be recall\'d through our poetry;
The hot iron : their pen; the slaves\' gore : their ink.
\'Pon all this that lot will be compell\'d to think.
Lilies will bloom, and lilies will wither :
But, this bloody lily shalt remain forever;
Yon scream now hath been well immortalis\'d :
Yon scream always shalt be memoris\'d.”
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