"Liberator"
Under a street lamp
within its sickly yellow glow,
she found me starving.
Looking deeply into
my famished eyes,
"I'll feed you." She said,
"In return, you must feed me...
what is it you're craving?"
I replied
with digits twitching,
"I want to touch my fingers
to that translucent, milky shadow,
Ahhhhh...
just there
at the base of your throat
where the pulse,
beats like butterfly wings
And I want to taste the death
from your lips..."
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Oohhh, should I meet her?! I'm not sure. heehee.
LOL...you have made my day!
ever, eddy
always, Cat
Hmmm dont anybody turn out the light! If theres a power outage i'm outta here.
Dark deeds are afoot.
thank you b-e, for reading and responding to my first poem on this site!
ever, eddy styx (the male alter-ego of Cat)
Hello, Eddy. What a great alter ego you are!
I don't think one would want to meet mine, but they do serve a purpose, as this fine poem demonstrates. Well done, well presented poem, Candlewitch.
hello Louis,
I would love to meet your alter-ego! does he/she write poetry? I say the things that Cat is too civilized to say. I freely give vent to my thoughts and emotions. I "put my rage on the page!" thanks for your response!
ever, eddy
always, Cat
I really don't think you would enjoy meeting him. He harbors the rage carried by my soul. He does, however, fuel some of the intensity of my poetry.
Thank you for your understanding and your comment.
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hello Louis,
you are most welcome!
ever, eddy
always, Cat
Hum, I do believe this sounds like the eddy I met sometime back! your dark side is as talented as your 'light side' that's for sure! I do like this very much. I can picture the scene going going down as though the encounter actual happened. The conversation is definitely believable in a scary way...not sure i'd want to know the outcome though... although methinks I actually know what it would have been!
LOL! your intuition on the outcome is very perceptive 😉 thanks for your words of encouragement!
ever, eddy
hugs, Cat
my pleasure my friend! I guess i'm perceptive that way...LOL!
Very dark and disturbing. Very macabre of you. You have a lot of things going for you in this poem. Your imagery is beautiful, and disturbing. The meter, and rhyme scheme is nice. I would love to see this expanded maybe with other poems of how this situation came up. What a character you have created here. Very good job. The small problem with it is the punctuation on lines like just there
at the base of your throat
where the pulse
beats like butterfly wings
Maybe re read it and see if you feel a comma belongs there? I think it might find a good home after pulse? Just to break it up a little?
I personally like macabre so I give this a 9/10. Great write.
dear Stephen,
your advise is valuable and most welcome! thank you for taking the time to read and help. you will be hearing more from eddy styx, as he is a constant companion of mine.
always, Cat
ever, eddy
Creeptastically written delving into necromancy divinely really nice poetess
thank you whisperingquill,
it is very nice to meet you! I hope to see you around the site 🙂
ever, eddy
always, Cat
Ooo, this one's really good! Very dark, very mysterious, I love it!
why, thank you very much! it is so nice to meet you!
ever, eddy
always, Cat
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