Eyes closed
Faint pictures
Faint voices
Eyes open
Stare into space
Eyes closed
More faint voices
Loud breaking noise
Eyes open
Take a breath
Sudden pain
Grab chest
Pain disappears
Eyes closed
See nothing but darkness
And then I see you
Eyes open
Tears form
And fall
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Author:
JayFace21 (
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- Comment from author about the poem: Wrote this cause we are all heartbroken at one time, the one time that it really hurts
- Category: Unclassified
- Views: 31
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Comments2
I can picture a scene from this poem... it's sad but I like the poem. I like it because it can create a visual of true emotion. Good job.
Excellent! You captured heartbreak well. I like how you presented it, making your point with the short lines. Great! I began to feel it.
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