I loved you
ANGELA & BRIAN said:

HI PLUUMY-EMBER (great pen name !) Welcome to MPS it is a Great Site ~ sorry you havn*t had more comments. The WAY MPS works is we read and comment on each others POEMS and reply to comments etc. You can also add MEMBERS as Friends ~ OK. Im 35 and I live in ESSEX (UK) and I share this site with ANGELA my Fiancee !
I loved the Structure and Subject and flow of your First Poem (more please) ! Just over 40 lines (nice length) no rhyme but plenty rhythm ! I hesitated a bit before commenting because I was trying to focus on the essence of the Poem ! In the end I decided it was a Young Adult (last line !) speaking to their TEENAGE SELF ? I have to go back 15 or more years ~ but is something I often do and meditate on the *might - have - beens* ! I too am quite fond of my Teenage Self ! There are regrets ~ Ive had a few ~ but then again ~ too few to mention ............ ! The vocabulary I loved was *crooked ways* *smile devoid of sentiment* *darker descents* *melancholy* *inferiority* *the lies* *projection on the wall* *pastel sunsets* *demon* *lost identity* *a memory* etc etc ! It reminded me so much of my LOST YOUTH which is why I chose the interpretation I did ~ OK.
Please let me know your interpretation of the POEM ~ THANKS

Blessings & Peace & Joy
Yours BRIAN (UK)
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August 19th, 2019 08:43