Comments received on poems by Adelodun Toheeb
YOU AND I
L. B. Mek said:
\'If the mammoth mountain could efface you,
You\'d remain the blood that flows through my veins.\'
(pulse sizzling, like the lava of passion
you imbue into each line
of this unashamedly, wholehearted dedication..
a part of me, naturally
envies the object of your affection
who instilled such inspiration
into that pooling ink of love
in your heart)..
a beautifully worded, dedication
thanks for sharing
\'my fruit would be vapid\'
what an acute phrasing
(sans of love
vapid of heart,)
indeed
March 17th, 2022 04:37
L. B. Mek said:
\'If the mammoth mountain could efface you,
You\'d remain the blood that flows through my veins.\'
(pulse sizzling, like the lava of passion
you imbue into each line
of this unashamedly, wholehearted dedication..
a part of me, naturally
envies the object of your affection
who instilled such inspiration
into that pooling ink of love
in your heart)..
a beautifully worded, dedication
thanks for sharing
\'my fruit would be vapid\'
what an acute phrasing
(sans of love
vapid of heart,)
indeed
March 17th, 2022 04:37