Comments received on poems by butterfly_nerd
What right have they?
Morwenna said:
I like the (mostly) steady meter and the sustained tone of political fury and disgust. I also like the rhymes of the last couple of lines of each stanza - there but not clunky. Since the meter is steady, I myself would prefer it to stay that way almost always. I think it would fit the feeling of a political speech. I have a partner who reads out my poems to me, without me readng them to him first. It is very helpful to me in hearing when the rhythm change is smooth or jars.
And I agree with what you say in the poem.
June 25th, 2022 17:08
Morwenna said:
I like the (mostly) steady meter and the sustained tone of political fury and disgust. I also like the rhymes of the last couple of lines of each stanza - there but not clunky. Since the meter is steady, I myself would prefer it to stay that way almost always. I think it would fit the feeling of a political speech. I have a partner who reads out my poems to me, without me readng them to him first. It is very helpful to me in hearing when the rhythm change is smooth or jars.
And I agree with what you say in the poem.
June 25th, 2022 17:08
What right have they?
dusk arising said:
Confused. Youre blaming people for blaming people. WHO is blaming WHO?
Lot of anger and negativity in your piece. It reads like an angry vent which is OK. Hopefully there are broader more positive areas in which you creatively write.
Read more poetry if you want to be a poet. Your profile shows you read none on here. Consideration of other poets writing will help you improve your writing if thats what you want to achieve.
June 25th, 2022 08:33
dusk arising said:
Confused. Youre blaming people for blaming people. WHO is blaming WHO?
Lot of anger and negativity in your piece. It reads like an angry vent which is OK. Hopefully there are broader more positive areas in which you creatively write.
Read more poetry if you want to be a poet. Your profile shows you read none on here. Consideration of other poets writing will help you improve your writing if thats what you want to achieve.
June 25th, 2022 08:33
What right have they?
Doggerel Dave said:
For my money I\'d like to see more of the content of your Comment embodied in the poetry itself.
I hope you stay, but far too many pop in with one poem and then move on...
Good luck anyway.
June 25th, 2022 04:34
Doggerel Dave said:
For my money I\'d like to see more of the content of your Comment embodied in the poetry itself.
I hope you stay, but far too many pop in with one poem and then move on...
Good luck anyway.
June 25th, 2022 04:34
What right have they?
Paul Bell said:
You just summed up the human being, who for some reason craves more and more. As we see in history, they do get replaced, though sometimes by an even bigger dipshit.
June 25th, 2022 03:17
Paul Bell said:
You just summed up the human being, who for some reason craves more and more. As we see in history, they do get replaced, though sometimes by an even bigger dipshit.
June 25th, 2022 03:17
