Comments received on poems by Sorav
Substitution
L. B. Mek said:
\'Subvert my empathy!\'
how sad
that intoxicating distortion
of wrath...
I hope a days may come
where you seek salvation, beyond
anger\'s tendrils
for within that lava heat you spew
upon our callous world
exist, ashes of your own defeat
(a great write, dear poet
such brevity of impassioned commentary)
if you permit me, asking for you patience
in advance, I have quoted lyrics below
from a song, by a favoured artist of mine
from \'why do\' by that wordsmith
Akala
\'Living in foulest conditions, still breed proudest traditions
We speak, everybody listen
But we still jealous, when one of us shining
Like I\'m grindin, why\'s my man shining?
I ain\'t criticizing, been known to be whiling
Just tryna give you food for thought when I\'m rhyming
Cause I\'m tired of youts\' them dyin\' cause there\'s no guidance
But I won\'t have my fam cryin
An eye for an eye? That\'s your science?
Cool we\'re the same then, let\'s get blinded\'
(treasure your capacity for empathy
however hard, it may be
to exist while embracing awareness
indeed this is a burden, far
too few, are gifted)
January 23rd, 2023 06:00
L. B. Mek said:
\'Subvert my empathy!\'
how sad
that intoxicating distortion
of wrath...
I hope a days may come
where you seek salvation, beyond
anger\'s tendrils
for within that lava heat you spew
upon our callous world
exist, ashes of your own defeat
(a great write, dear poet
such brevity of impassioned commentary)
if you permit me, asking for you patience
in advance, I have quoted lyrics below
from a song, by a favoured artist of mine
from \'why do\' by that wordsmith
Akala
\'Living in foulest conditions, still breed proudest traditions
We speak, everybody listen
But we still jealous, when one of us shining
Like I\'m grindin, why\'s my man shining?
I ain\'t criticizing, been known to be whiling
Just tryna give you food for thought when I\'m rhyming
Cause I\'m tired of youts\' them dyin\' cause there\'s no guidance
But I won\'t have my fam cryin
An eye for an eye? That\'s your science?
Cool we\'re the same then, let\'s get blinded\'
(treasure your capacity for empathy
however hard, it may be
to exist while embracing awareness
indeed this is a burden, far
too few, are gifted)
January 23rd, 2023 06:00