Comments received on poems by white lily lament
Nothing
sorenbarrett said:
I loved the line (Perfect purity is emptiness.) This is a deep philosophical statement. A very nicely written piece
October 2nd, 2025 03:46
sorenbarrett said:
I loved the line (Perfect purity is emptiness.) This is a deep philosophical statement. A very nicely written piece
October 2nd, 2025 03:46
Nothing
Paul Bell said:
Yes, we all go through the motions now, politeness personified, the revolutionary in us all has been confiscated.
October 2nd, 2025 03:25
Paul Bell said:
Yes, we all go through the motions now, politeness personified, the revolutionary in us all has been confiscated.
October 2nd, 2025 03:25
Die in the Summertime
sorenbarrett said:
Some dark images cast in this poem of rotten roots, lungs eaten away, poison. There is a slight hope given in the word bloom. A rather stark poem leaving a shadow of hope.
September 29th, 2025 04:09
sorenbarrett said:
Some dark images cast in this poem of rotten roots, lungs eaten away, poison. There is a slight hope given in the word bloom. A rather stark poem leaving a shadow of hope.
September 29th, 2025 04:09
Between a political poster and a suicide note
sorenbarrett said:
Words of distress decorate this poem of labeled disorder. It speaks in cutting words of pain and hurt. It bleeds its message across the page. Nicely written in very descriptive terms.
September 28th, 2025 03:46
sorenbarrett said:
Words of distress decorate this poem of labeled disorder. It speaks in cutting words of pain and hurt. It bleeds its message across the page. Nicely written in very descriptive terms.
September 28th, 2025 03:46
generation of suicides.
Paul Bell said:
The weight of the world is on the computer children.
Everything at the click of a button, but no actual reality because the outside world is not for them.
No likes, bring out suicidal thoughts which are only magnified as the days drag on.
September 24th, 2025 04:31
Paul Bell said:
The weight of the world is on the computer children.
Everything at the click of a button, but no actual reality because the outside world is not for them.
No likes, bring out suicidal thoughts which are only magnified as the days drag on.
September 24th, 2025 04:31
generation of suicides.
sorenbarrett said:
A sense of helplessness and frustration pervades this poem. A society bedeviled. Well written
September 24th, 2025 04:21
sorenbarrett said:
A sense of helplessness and frustration pervades this poem. A society bedeviled. Well written
September 24th, 2025 04:21
my right to melancholy
sorenbarrett said:
There is comfort for some in sadness just as there is in silence. This poem speaks of mourning and its process. A melancholic feel to this poem. Very nicely written
September 21st, 2025 03:56
sorenbarrett said:
There is comfort for some in sadness just as there is in silence. This poem speaks of mourning and its process. A melancholic feel to this poem. Very nicely written
September 21st, 2025 03:56
politicalcorrectness?
RSM0812 said:
This is a very political driven poem. Your choice of words get the opinion and imagery through perfectly. Sad but true, im afraid. The vices of capitalism strikes again.
September 20th, 2025 08:15
RSM0812 said:
This is a very political driven poem. Your choice of words get the opinion and imagery through perfectly. Sad but true, im afraid. The vices of capitalism strikes again.
September 20th, 2025 08:15
politicalcorrectness?
sorenbarrett said:
When the the two become extreme they become the same Fascists and Communists the right becomes the left and the left the right both rule with oppression. It is meant to be no choice only the magicians choice where it matters not what you choose it always comes up with what the guiding power wants. Illusion is the name of the game. A lovely write
September 20th, 2025 03:53
sorenbarrett said:
When the the two become extreme they become the same Fascists and Communists the right becomes the left and the left the right both rule with oppression. It is meant to be no choice only the magicians choice where it matters not what you choose it always comes up with what the guiding power wants. Illusion is the name of the game. A lovely write
September 20th, 2025 03:53
politicalcorrectness?
Doggerel Dave said:
As I read this, you argue that there\'s no difference between them. Correct?
Brave effort.
September 20th, 2025 02:53
Doggerel Dave said:
As I read this, you argue that there\'s no difference between them. Correct?
Brave effort.
September 20th, 2025 02:53
plastic world
Paul Bell said:
Not a lot has changed since year dot.
I\'m always amazed when dumb old guys have an argument and millions of common people die over it.
I\'m waiting for the time when the common people utter the words. \'\'Not my war gov.\'\'
September 19th, 2025 06:19
Paul Bell said:
Not a lot has changed since year dot.
I\'m always amazed when dumb old guys have an argument and millions of common people die over it.
I\'m waiting for the time when the common people utter the words. \'\'Not my war gov.\'\'
September 19th, 2025 06:19
plastic world
sorenbarrett said:
Quite a critique of the system we live in. The evils of capitalism exposed in poetic form. A lovely write.
September 19th, 2025 06:16
sorenbarrett said:
Quite a critique of the system we live in. The evils of capitalism exposed in poetic form. A lovely write.
September 19th, 2025 06:16
My nation of Prozac
sorenbarrett said:
Truly existential this poem proclaims the search for self and identity where external anchors are eroded and all that is left is the internal. Nicely done.
September 19th, 2025 03:49
sorenbarrett said:
Truly existential this poem proclaims the search for self and identity where external anchors are eroded and all that is left is the internal. Nicely done.
September 19th, 2025 03:49
My nation of Prozac
rebellion_in_sanity said:
One of most unpretentious howl in the vaccum- lament for the unfulfilled dreams, an existential dread about the where she is going. A definite and emphatic fave.
The most striking feature was the refusal of melodrama and steady restraint. I used to be a fan of Kafka, Conrad, Lawrence- somehow the poem reminded me of their restraints after nearly four decades. 🙏
September 19th, 2025 03:12
rebellion_in_sanity said:
One of most unpretentious howl in the vaccum- lament for the unfulfilled dreams, an existential dread about the where she is going. A definite and emphatic fave.
The most striking feature was the refusal of melodrama and steady restraint. I used to be a fan of Kafka, Conrad, Lawrence- somehow the poem reminded me of their restraints after nearly four decades. 🙏
September 19th, 2025 03:12
