I Give You The Stars You Gave Me The Moon
Looked up toward the sky, you’re gone too soon
Melancholy Mood
No Spiritual food
Separation Blues
No just dues
Queen has lost her crown
No silent whispers to take me down
Spin me around
Breathless anticipation as my feet touches ground
Uplift me, no words needed ever to be said
Star has fallen, Moon has fled
No comfort to please
No emotional tease
This feeling has brought me down to my knees
Darn, can I say that again
Double Darn, displaying emotions can sometimes be an earthly sin
The death of self
The flow of mental juices, was worth more than wealth
No passionate end
No ear to lend
I give up, I give in
Shouldn’t even let that quite dance begin
Got caught
Nurse to heal the world, true emotions as I mentally sought
Feel like my own patient trying to cure myself
A quick recovery, once I learn to place those lingering feelings back on a shelf
Thief of Hearts strikes again
Captured my heart, soul, as he gently caressed my skin
I want my heart back
He covets my mind beautifully in his charismatic attack
What a perfect poetic knack
Handsome Cupid with a straight shot of his bow and arrow
Bulls Eye, fallen sparrow
My heart, it’s most likely kept in his back pocket
He has the key to unlock my emotions, euphoric feelings, more powerful than the blast of a skyrocket
As the congregation says, oh well
It appears I must creep back to the scene of the crime to get my heart back, if I’m successful, only time will tell
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Author:
The Gifted One (Pseudonym) (
Offline) - Published: September 19th, 2018 05:02
- Comment from author about the poem: Three things cannot be long hidden: the sun, the moon, and the truth. Buddha
- Category: Love
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Brilliant piece of writing. The flow was really nice to read and the interpretations, the metaphor is alive all the way through to the end. A;so, I'd love to come and live on the Moon with you. How such fun could be created by living on another planet. Excellent write, my friend.
Why thank you Kevin for taking the time to read and then adding a comment. Have a great afternoon as well.
The Gifted One
Indeed I did enjoy the afternoon sat compiling some poems together. Thanks for your positive feedback.
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Ooookkkaaaayyyyy.
So, when I was browsing through today's poems on the front page, I came across this. So I said to myself, "Gosh, with a title like that it had better be something good." Now let me tell you, I was not expecting an a,a,a,a, - b,b,b,b, rhyme scheme free verse ballad. That was sneaky. I was expecting some love-junkie mess about feelings being reciprocated and all is well. That's not what I'm here for.
Alrighty then, let's do it.
So, the poem is about giving someone your affection and having them return it in a very brief manner, only for them to disappear. That's some rough material. I like how it just jumped straight into the whole wishing they would have stayed, and then the transition to how it affected the author. That was a nice touch. Overall, a proportionately cryptic read with a hint of sadness and loathing while the protagonist is trying to identify their emotional state.
I enjoyed it. Thank you for posting.
Mmm, you are good. I hope in more ways than one love…wink. Oh, thank you for delving into the abyss of ecstasy raining inside of me…I mean my words, sorry.
The Gifted One
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