Awake

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  kevin browne September 28th, 2018 06:17

  I've read some poems on here this morning and found the standard quite outstanding. This is one of them. It owns a purity of such deepened and relentlessly opens up a new perception of what poetry can do. To me, this is hitting pretty high towards the top noted. Stunningly written. I think I need to step up a touch or two.

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    sylviasearcherSeptember 28th, 2018 06:55

    Thank you for reading and your kind words.
    
    I am always in doubt of whether I can even call what I write poems.
    
    The topic of this one was also one I usually cannot usually genuinely free myself into.
    
    Thanks for reading and your kind comments

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    kevin browneSeptember 28th, 2018 08:18

    Your welcome but, please allow those thoughts to disappear into thin air. First of all, allow you to allow your doubts to not let any doubt to get in the way. Sounds complicated, but it's quite simple really. All you have to do is write something then the doubt will clear the clouds of confusion revealing such beautiful landscapes so intrinsically placed in your thoughts. How can anyone doubt that? And ther're yours to keep.

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    sylviasearcherSeptember 28th, 2018 08:21

    Thanks Kevin. I do allow myself to write and even share. I just never know if what I write is any good. But you are right. They are part of me to keep.
    
    I like how you used a lot of words to say what you meant. I do that all the time!

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  Christina8 September 28th, 2018 08:10

  This is an outstanding piece of poetry!! I agree with Kevin that the calibur of this piece is top notch! I rarely save favorites, but this is one of them. Great job!

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    sylviasearcherSeptember 28th, 2018 08:14

    Thank you Christina. It is so uplifting when people take the time to read something I have written and to let me know it was worthy of their time.

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  orchidee September 28th, 2018 11:23

  Well it's definitely poetry, and good! Does not have to rhyme. Though I'm fussing about rhyming, syllables, etc, but necessary for some of my semi-formal stuff!

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    sylviasearcherSeptember 28th, 2018 12:21

    I thought it did rhyme, lol...
    
    Sure there's a compliment hidden in there somewhere.
    
    I struggle to be bound by parameters when the words spill out from my messy heart.
    
    Thanks for reading my messy offering! 🙃

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  orchidee September 28th, 2018 14:06

  Oops yes, does rhyme! lol. Sorry!
  Sometimes I don't spot the rhymes, if they are not immediately in the next line of the poem, such as …..cat, then the next line......mat.

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    sylviasearcherSeptember 29th, 2018 03:25

    Oh I hardly ever use aa bb cc.
    
    Sorry I made you read it twice!
    🙃

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  Tamara Beryl Latham - The Poet September 29th, 2018 13:40

  Extremely romantic poem that clearly shows your depth of feeling and the images presented in your write. I don't doubt the words you submitted are considered poems. Do not doubt yourself and keep up with your writing. We enjoy it! 🙂

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  Simple-Man87 October 23rd, 2018 09:44

  This was incredible. So much feeling, and passion. Very well done.

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    sylviasearcherOctober 23rd, 2018 10:02

    Thanks. It was for my muse.

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  Neville December 6th, 2018 05:18

  Move me like your poetry
  Until I'm weak with breathless ecstasy
  
  I really must remember these lines for when I'm standing at a bar behind someone I feel drawn to... there are other line here too but that would be telling.. and of course, a gentleman never tells... N

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    sylviasearcherDecember 6th, 2018 06:43

    You can have that line for free 😉

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    NevilleDecember 6th, 2018 10:19

    How very kind, thank you sylviasearcher, I owe ya one..

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    sylviasearcherDecember 6th, 2018 10:27

    I said it was free 😌