The Six O'clock Offering

Unobtrusive Sun

The fold was gold with shining locks

The clock struck Six before I knocked

Intimidated, concentrated on my box


The open door gave room for more

Exasperated consultation

Notions of unmet devotion 

To the Maker's mark


But surprises filled the alleyway that day

Intrusive sun brought forth from rising morn

Then pleasant warmth scorched my frozen arms

And the alarm inside my humble box

Was silenced 


At Seven O'clock

  • Author: Unobtrusive Sun (Offline Offline)
  • Published: October 7th, 2018 19:39
  • Comment from author about the poem: This piece focuses on the experience of interpersonal acceptance, and how it was found in an unsuspecting way. It's partly my story and the story of others I've known. Many of the lines have biblical backdrops (although I don't consider myself entirely Christian).
  • Category: Reflection
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  • vanabba3

    Wow! I really like this one, it's more mysterious, and I like that! Yes, I did get the biblical references. Curious about your statement about not being "entirely Christian".

    • Unobtrusive Sun

      Thanks for taking interest!
      For a long time, I was a pretty hardcore Christian after not being one before that. Now, I keep an open mind, but try to be as objective and honest as possible about what reality truly is. So, I don't have any spite toward the Christian God but I'm not entirely banking on it anymore. It's a lot to convey in a short comment, but essentially I'm seeking real truth, and I'm not sure of what that is yet. Haha, maybe that makes some kind of sense. Thanks for asking!

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