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Dihuno

No sunrise more warming or welcoming

No flower more beautiful or radiant

Than receiving your smile as you wake

 

Can’t wait to watch you break from slumber

To see your face light up

In that moment we become whole & one

The world, universe, paradise, moon & sun

 

Your face is filled with love as your smile expands

My world ignites into a thousand shooting stars

That innocent look in those bluest eyes

Sends me soaring high into the clouds & skies

 

No sunset more stunning or satisfying

No poem more perfect or consuming

Than witnessing your smile as you wake…

 

…if I could keep just one thing of yours forever

It would be that glorious smile I’d take

 

Can’t wait to watch you break from slumber

To see your face light up

In that moment we become one complete soul

The world, universe, paradise, moon & sun...whole

 

© 2017 Unsub

 

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  • Laura

    Unsub,

    I wholeheartedly agree with Santi and Lawless!

    I love the poem in its entirety!
    I especially love, love, love this line...
    “In that moment we become one complete soul”!

    This will be an amazing gift for your beautiful lady! A treasure for sure!

    As always...

    ~Laura~

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      Laura.

      Well I deliver it to her on Saturday; hope she likes it!

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    • onepauly

      I must say,
      it is a great one!
      worthy to be a real poem.

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        1Paulie,

        appreciated.

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      • Syd

        Beautiful Unsub. I'd probably keep her knickers rather than her smile 😂. I hope you forgive me and have a sense of humour. I've had a drink.

        Seriously though, really good poem with vivid descriptions.

        Enjoyed - Syd

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          Syd,

          I was already wearing her knickers so chose the smile this time.

          Gave me the only laugh I've had on here in weeks!

          Thanks for dropping in,

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          • Syd

            Ha ha ha. You're very welcome mate.

          • Goldfinch60

            What a wonderful poem, so full of love. Your souls will be together as you travel through eternity as one with your love forever with you.

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              GF,

              many thanks my dear friend,

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            • orchidee

              Ahh, a comforting write. Did we sit down and have that coffee and slice of cake, then it caused you to write this?!

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                orchidee,

                it was those funny mushrooms you gave me that caused this unexpected change in direction. Thankfully they are wearing off now so back to gloom & doom soon.

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                • orchidee

                  Arrghh not doom and gloom! But I must not snuff out themes that I may not be keen on! Have more coffee and cake. I sound like Worzel Gummidge!

                • dusk arising

                  Dusk sits watching the kitten playing with ball of wool waiting for a dark shadow to creep across the scene and the cat's shuddering fear become a bloodied smear across a painful page of woe where hope is snatched by a mangled hand reaching out from a rusted grille where sewerage falls and chokes the essence of joy but....... nope, the sun is shining, a tinkle of rain reminds us of such joys a rainbow may bring and to cap it all a wonderful positive piece from unsub brings a delightful smile of surprise.

                  Good to read.

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                    dusk,

                    have waited weeks to have a good laugh here on MPS & today you & Syd made me laugh out loud twice.

                    I'm so sorry I didn't draw a dark veil across this one...I feel I've let you down. I'll be back to full misery soon...but apparently do I need to wait until after the holiday season.

                    Thanks again,

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                  • LAWLESS

                    Have a nice time away from this site. I look forward to your return. Hopefully some more love poems. Who am I kidding, I want to be thoroughly depressed again by your work. It makes me appreciate that my life isn't as bad as yours!

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                      don't look forward to my return; I'm back but nothing to look forward to. Just my usual depressing shit!

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                      • LAWLESS

                        Hello again bud. You've given me time to forget our discussions about whatever they were, suicidal shit maybe. You should write whatever you want. By now the suicidals know to not take you seriously. I guess I do remember; it's time to begin drinking!

                      • sylviasearcher

                        Oh don't you just love art!

                        How it creates new spaces in our mind, interactions and understanding as we share it.

                        I thought the poem was beautiful as I read it yesterday. I was not very well so have been struggling with the right words.

                        I disagree a little with the assumption that empty vessels, such as myself cannot take warmth and hope from your poetry. Your lighter pieces are very much a part of you.

                        Yes it may make me wonder of a feeling I have never shared. Yet it gives me hope that it can exist. If not for me then for one of my favourite poets!

                        Do I really have to wait 39 days for another poem!

                        I think you should do an advent countdown! Or at least the 12 days of Christmas.

                        In fact I have just given myself a really clichéd idea for a fusion poem!

                        I was more offended by the fact that you said Syd and dusk gave you your first laugh in ages when I thought I was always extremely entertaining.

                        My career options were always:
                        Educational psychologist
                        Writer
                        Comedienne
                        First lib dem prime minister 😱😱😱

                        Should not have admitted to that 😳

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                          sylvia,

                          I don't know how to explain how my computer ommitted your name from the list of poets who had given me my first laugh in ages. I have sent an angry letter to the internet office but haven't heard back yet!

                          First Lib Dem Prime minister...hmmm! First laugh of 2019 goes to YOU!

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                          • sylviasearcher

                            Oh I overshared... 😬

                          • Jason Vancelette (AKA Pharaoh33)

                            Wow..beautiful and romantic..even for a brat like you...lmao..I wish you all the best in your relationship sphere..I am always happy to see it ..it's what keeps my own spirits high and hopeful of finding my next love..in any event..you get quite a lot of attention on this site..I've never seen such response on any of my work as you get on everything u write..then again, my shit is very blatant and bold to say the least and I'm sure it offends some, and that some have no clue what the hell IM talking about...but at least it's real and honest and I never hold back..I see many poets worrying about how to word things as not to offend people..if they take offense, who cares? Like this guy above giving you shit for writing about something that happens to be one of his misfortunate shortcomings ...that was weird..I once had some freak attacking me for my piece called "The Truth About Amnesia" because he supposedly suffered from it before..I let him have it and he erased his entire account...so his comments are gone now..it was tacky to have attached to my work thou so I may have actually been the one to erase them..but it was crazy how he attacked me, saying that my work is not poetry, that I am uneducated and write about nonsense...which must have been bullshit because how would he know about my work if he had not been following it before allowing himself to become a victim of my honesty...lol hope you have a wonderful holiday season...I will catch up to you next year brat!,,

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                              Pharaoh,

                              well getting so much attention means I can't go shopping without being houndered by autograph hunters & selfie addicts! LOL!

                              Keep writing your "blant & bold shit" & have a quiet life! LOL! I enjoy your work btw!

                              I'm done with being told what I can & when I can post...if you don't like it, move on; I'm not offended.

                              Chat soon my friend & thanks for dropping in.

                              Brat!

                              • Jason Vancelette (AKA Pharaoh33)

                                Yeah...I feel the same way...you are a brat, but IT TAKES ONE TO KNOW ONE..LMAO..XXXOOO

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                              • Jason Vancelette (AKA Pharaoh33)

                                I JUSAT SAW WHERE YOU HAD THOUGHT TWICE ABOUT POSTING THIS PIECE IN RESPECT TO THOSE WHO ARE LONELY, ETC...THATS THEIR OWN FUALT IF THEY ARE...NEVER HOLD ANYTHING BACK BECAJUSE IT MAY OFFEND SOMEONE UNLESS THERE ARE CHILDREN READING...EVERYONE ELSE IS GROWN AND TRUST ME, THEIR WILL ALWAYS BE HATERS OUT THERE REGARDLESS SO WHO CARES?LOL

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                                  33,

                                  you misunderstood, that was actually a dig at Lawless who seemed to have an issue with me posting my poems of suicide & depression around xmas as he said it can cause & upset people...I have told him to fuck off & this was a little tongue n cheek comment.

                                  I post whatever theme I want when I want...I'm not dictated to! That said I do respect people's beliefs & lifestyles & try not to openly attack anybody who sees the world different to me. We are all individuals with different outlooks. I respect their choices & wish some idiots would respect mine.

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                                  • Jason Vancelette (AKA Pharaoh33)

                                    Yeah, DO I EVER KNOW WHAT YOU MEAN>>>>I HavE NEVER UNDERSTOOD WHY SO MANY PEOPLE HOLD BACK SO MUCH WITH EVERYTHING THAT THEY DO...WHICH MAKES FOR A BLAH EXISTENCE FOR THEM...WITH WRITING, FOR INSTANCE...THINK OF ALL THE CRAP WE READ ON HERE AND ELSEWHERE FROM PEOPLE WHO YOU CAN TELL HELD BACK WHEN THEY WERE WRITING THEIR SHIT...SO, IT ENDS UP BEING LACKLUSTER WRITING...LAWLESS...IM NOT SURE I KNOW WHO HE IS..PEOPLE CHANGE THEIR PROFILE NAMES ON HERE A LOT TOO I THINK OR JUST DISAPPEAR TOTALLY....AND WHEN THEY LEAVE ALL THEIR COMMENTS GO WITH THEM FOR SOM E REASON....YOU ARE A NATURAL BORN WRITER LIKE ME AND NATURAL BORN WRITERS WOULD NEVER DREAM OF HOLDING BACK ON ANYTHING..

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