My mind,
Working tirelessly,
Making me tiresome,
My lover,
My friend,
My enemy,
Morphed into one,
Presented in a parcel of poison,
My mind.
Powerful enough to drown oceans,
Yet struggling to swim.
- lost at sea
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Author:
r.kaur (
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- Comment from author about the poem: Hello, I am a new poet. I am only 18 years old but have recently found my creative outlet in poetry. I am by no means a proffesional feedback would be really appreciated.
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THANKS FRIEND ~ For your first Poem ! It is an elegantly penned & spaced ~ free verse dodecet (12 lines). The subject ANXIETY ~ is something most of us (25+) can relate to ~ as an attitude of MIND ! All our Human Interactions (Lovers ~ Friends ~ Enemies etc) contribute (positively or negatively) to our level of Anxiety ! YES our Minds are very powerful and cope with most situations but ~ paradoxically ~ drowning in the minutiae of everyday life. Thanks for sharing more please. Yours BRIAN & ANGELA. Please check our site ~ Thanks B & A !
Thank you so much for your comment!! It is very much appreciated!!
R.Kaur
I like your writing here. I can relate to the subject. I look forward to your next composition.
Kindest Regards
Thank you! Look forward to sharing more of my writing.
Kind regards
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