I can not explain why, my child,
That such things must be so.
We simply give belief to beings greater than ourselves,
And send them above, or far below.
After having shed their mortal bindings,
What do you suppose they will do?
Will creation take once again its reins
To begin life for them anew?
Corrupted by no emotion, entranced through no decree,
The spirits of our ancestors roam unbound -
In the mystery we've named "Eternity".
We depart these tiny hopes with conviction that they will follow.
Reminding us all that there is virtue in seeing tomorrow.
Shed tears, and hold firm that blissful wish.
Because the future, you see, is not something to be transfixed.
These words are not meant for consolation.
They are meant to sculpt a path -
So to make a choice now you must endeavor,
For you hold their wills within your grasp.
Set aflame that little light, dear child,
Unto the stars it shall be freed.
From moral faith - strength of heart;
And give rise to a subtle dream.
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Nicholas Browning (
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- Comment from author about the poem: I wrote this not for myself, but for everyone that reads it. Honestly I am not too sure if I am back for good, but when I have something I think is worth sharing I will leave it here for all of you. This poem is about finding meaning, whether it be in yourself or in a belief. If you have enjoyed the read, I sincerely appreciate it. Thank you for stopping by.
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GOOD EVENING NICK ~ BRIAN here thanks for sharing your Poem ! Thanks for your comment on my response to Diamond about STRUCTURED & UNSTRUCTURED Poetry. Poetry is emotional and therefore ~ in a sense the SUBJECT is more important than the STRUCTURE ! In essence POETIC FORMS like SONNETS & HAIKU etc evolved to ameliorate the SUBJECT of the Poem. This led to the importance of Rhyme & Rhythm bcause early Poetry was Oral rather than written. Sagas would be repeated and memorised round the camp fire. We used to practice this when I was in the Scouts making up and reciting verses without ever writing them down. Limerics and folk poetry is a bit like this Simon & Garfunkel & Bob Dylan & John Denver are good examples of folk Poetry also Johnny Cash ~ Dolly Parton etc & Blue Grass & Country & Gospel it all starts out as reciable Poetry ! All those I have cited are excellent Poets as were the Beatles in the UK.
I like your Poem ~ which is (as you say) about finding meaning. Every stanza is essentially a QUATRIAN (even S 3.) which has a long first line ! There is a consistent Rhyme Pattern. S 1. xaxa S 2. xbxb S 3. (split first line) xcxc S 4. Is two doublets ddee S 5. xfxf S 6. xgxg Some of your Rhymes Stanzas 4 5 6 are half-rhymes (like PATH & GRASP) but this is good because a Good Poet should never sacrifice REASON for RHYME ! There is some underlying Rhythm making it easy to read ~ BUT more difficult to recite ! Look at Shakespeare or Longfellow or John Betjaman or Dylan or Robbie Burnes etc and you will see what I mean ! I do teach Poetry to Seniors so I am used to analysing Poetry & Blank Verse and I don't always PRACTICE what I PREACH. I am a Science Lecturer in a College. Shakespeare wrote naturally in IAMBIC PENTAMETER which is why his Plays are easy to learn & to recite and also sound so melodious !
You live in an interesting State ~ We like Bill Bryson who now lives in the UK. I have visited INDEPENDENCE with my Folks who knew People who moved to Tampa ~ to escape the SNOW !
Sorry to ramble on hope that all helps ~ keep posting ~ Please check our site. Angela is my Fiancee now in New Zealand on WORK EXCHANGE.
Blessings through Poetry ~ BRIAN (UK)
Thank you for the lengthy reply my good man. I had no idea you taught poetry. You know, the style to me never really mattered much. I kind of just go with the flow of what I think, and whatever hits the keyboard is usually what gets posted. (After amendments mind you, lol). Still though, I do enjoy seeing people set out to write something challenging by restricting themselves in the manner of form. It can lead to some very interesting works. Like I said, I do appreciate the time and sincerity in your reply. I've much to learn about poetic styles and literacy, but I hope to learn in time. And yes, all of your examples of different poet types are spot on. I like most of them as well. Have a pleasant day or evening my good sir. Thanks again!
these words are indeed worth sharing and certainly worthy of more attention.... a little gift for everyone methinks... Neville
That's nice of you to say Nev. Thanks for reading and commenting, it is very much appreciated.
pleasure & all mine. hope others will follow... have a good un...
This is so incredibly done. fantastic work.
Thank you very much for your saying so! I appreciate the comment, and the fact that you stopped by 😀
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