Halfway
that’s what I kept on feeling
no matter how hard I tried
Halfway
that’s how far I was always able to reach
and I was tired
as I crawled
and I clawed
and all I reached was halfway
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Author:
rebeccasr5 (
Offline) - Published: March 23rd, 2019 12:42
- Category: Reflection
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Comments1
I really like this truncated message of never reaching "all the way."
The only change I might consider is this: Halfway. That's what I keep feeling no matter how hard I try
That's how far I can reach
and I was tired
I crawled
I clawed
and all I reached...halffway.
I suggest the reduced language to create the sense of absence in the reader, the absence of just "halfway."
Nice work with lots of possibilities you can explore.
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