When I feel low and lonely
My love, my one and only,
Will smile at me and say,
“These blues will blow away,
And how can you feel lonely?
I am your one and only;
I’ll never go away
Until my dying day!”
When I feel weak and worthless,
Most miserable and mirthless,
My lovely lady sings,
Like angel without wings:
“Since when have you been worthless,
Most miserable and mirthless?
You’re singularly, strong;
God’s chosen all along!”
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Author:
Blue-eyed Bolla (Pseudonym) (
Offline) - Published: September 1st, 2019 08:37
- Comment from author about the poem: for my one and only, Lorraine
- Category: Love
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Comments1
Have you tried escaping rhyme? Once you do i think you may find yourself a lot more freedom. You are obviously a serious and commited poet as you regularly post on mps.
Rhyming lines restricts ones available vocabulary.
I do agree with you about the limitations of rhyme. I feel though, if the rhyme is not forced, then you should ok. I have attempted writing without rhyme, but it was a failure. I think for longer poems rhyme is not appropriate. (I agree with Milton here, see his intro to Paradise Lost) I try to keep mine short and sweet. Thanks for your feedback, it was much appreciated. 😉
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