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Decision (hijacked by Brian & Angela)

The future was clear

Plans were made

The team prepared

Everyone made the grade

 

We never expected this stray bullet

To strike one of us down

To scatter us all to the wind

& one bloodied into the ground

 

This is my last day

Tomorrow I drop off the grid

Below the radar

Doesn’t come much harder

Tomorrow I go dark

 

This is my last hour

Tomorrow I fall from the grid

Below the radar

Doesn’t come much harsher

Tomorrow I go dark

 

The path was so clear

Direction forward

The team positive

Everyone all-aboard

 

Never expected a shot from the dark

To strike one of us down

Scattering us all to the wind

& one down without a sound

 

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  • ANGELA & BRIAN

    GOOD EVENING UNSUB ~ We have enjoyed your unique contribution to MPS. It is a MULTIFACETED site and each one of US adds to its diversity. I have always seen MPS as an Open & Secular Site. Many Members come & go each Year of their own violition. The only reason I know for removal by the MANAGER ~ JULIAN YANOVER is if MEMBERS complain ! JULIAN has a record of & access to all our POETRY & Comments so he is as MANAGER in a position to make a unilateral decision ? Outback was not a threat to either of US ~ and as Christians we had a dialogue with OUT and neither of us complained. The other one I remember in the DIM & DISTANT past ~ before ANGELA was a remember was removed (by JULIAN following complaints) for SEXUALLY harassing FEMALE MEMBERS.
    We are assuming the reference in V2 is a reference to OUTBACK ~ or am I biting the wrong bullet ? We miss OUTBACK because He made us question our sacred COWS and that is POSITIVE CRITICISM ! OUTBACK NEVER CRITICSED US ~ but our adherence to EVANGELICAL CHRISTIANITY ~ which is always under attack ! We trust you POEM does not acctually mean you are leaving MPS ~ we will really miss you if you do !

    Peace & Joy to You & Yours
    Yours ANGELA & BRIAN 🧡💙🧡

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      You are both really beginning to f#ck me off! My poem has absolutely nothing to do with OUTBACK! Where the hell does it say his name? Nowhere! Now you've already made one member leave with your OUTBACK comments that were not invited wanted or needed or even bloody relevant to the poem & now here we are with you going off yet again on my poem with your damn OUTBACK nonsense. I won’t have you do this to our community! You have no right to attack our work to suit your own pathetic agenda.
      I don't want to hear it from you. I posted a poem. Sorry to disappoint you but it has nothing to do with the hassle on this site or any member; past or present. So don’t mention it if it isn’t there!
      This part of your comment is worthless & downright out of order:

      "Many Members come & go each Year of their own violition. The only reason I know for removal by the MANAGER ~ JULIAN YANOVER is if MEMBERS complain ! JULIAN has a record of & access to all our POETRY & Comments so he is as MANAGER in a position to make a unilateral decision ? Outback was not a threat to either of US ~ and as Christians we had a dialogue with OUT and neither of us complained. The other one I remember in the DIM & DISTANT past ~ before ANGELA was a remember was removed (by JULIAN following complaints) for SEXUALLY harassing FEMALE MEMBERS.
      We are assuming the reference in V2 is a reference to OUTBACK ~ or am I biting the wrong bullet ? We miss OUTBACK because He made us question our sacred COWS and that is POSITIVE CRITICISM ! OUTBACK NEVER CRITICSED US ~ but our adherence to EVANGELICAL CHRISTIANITY ~ which is always under attack!
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      Titanium left solely over you doing the same thing to his poetry. OUTBACK was removed because of numerous complaints - maybe you will be too if I also make a formal complaint about your posting here today. So please do respect the members here because they do not respect you after your comments made a new & damn good poet leave within days of your incessant OUTBACK comments. NOBODY wants to hear them; nobody!

      I suggest you not comment on my work ever again unless it actually has something to do with the poem itself.

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        Lawless,

        Not sure your last comment makes perfect sense, delete it & try again? Lol!

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      • Alan .S. Jeeves

        Good easy reading unsub. I like the 4 line stanzas and the final 'ricochet' like 'where did that come from?'. I guess you were wearing a full metal jacket when you put this together.

        Hope to see more of you,
        Kind regards, Alan

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          Alan,

          thanks for dropping by to read & comment.
          This whole piece is based around an idea for a novel. This would be part of the intro that leads into the story of revenge for the lost comrade. It's an idea & I'm better at ideas than completing them. LOL!

          Appreciate your time,

          regards

          Dan

        • myself and me

          Aye, aye Sir, follow your lead.

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            m&m (not M&M's or the rapper),

            I appreciate the positive vibe. I hope I'm not considered a leader; I need a sat nav to find myself!

            Unsub.

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              lovergirl,

              it's time to come clean. Tell us who you really are & why you are here.

              You have not been here long enough to make that connection about M&M. I suggest you stick your accusations up your ass!

              Don't speak your mind here as you said - your spoken mind is not wanted on my page.

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            • Poetic Dan

              Just going to read one more time...

            • Laura

              “Unsub,

              I’ve been away from MPS for a few weeks due to my Mom’s death! It has been a difficult month...mentally & physically!
              I needed a distraction from grieving my Mom’s passing! So I decided to visit MPS to read and perhaps make some comments on a few postings!

              OMG 😳...
              I’m beside myself. What is going on?!
              I read your poem...and then I read the comments! I’m so confused! So I read it two more times! I don’t understand how this is about Outback! Am I missing something?
              The poem actually reminded me of an event my dad with a bunch of his friends experienced when he was a young man! They loved to hunt! While they were hunting, one of my dad’s friend was shot by a stray bullet from another hunting group’s gun. They hadn’t noticed that they were there!
              My dad thought they were being targeted, so when they heard the shot they started running every which way!

              How is Outback involved in this! As a matter of fact, I haven’t seen any of his postings! I’ll have to look more carefully for them!
              Members are leaving because of comments made about Outback??
              I wish everyone’s work was respected and not criticized to the point of making members leave! That is not right or fair. It’s down right cruel!
              It seems that you’re so p***** off that you may consider leaving this site?! I just lost my mom!! I cannot withstand another loss! Please reconsider.! I enjoy your lyrical and musical talents. We need diversity here. We need YOU here!
              You are doing the right thing to prevent any new and/or established member of this site from leaving! You have my support! I’m with you all the way !
              All of this is really confusing and not making any sense to me!
              Please enlighten me!

              As always....
              Laura

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                Laura,

                This is a short reply to a wonderfully thoughtful comment.

                I totally agree with the points raised except that MPS needs me. It needs everyone!

                Thanks

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                • Laura

                  Unsub,

                  Thank you for acknowledging and responding to my comment.
                  Touché to your last remark...
                  “MPS...needs everyone!”...
                  including me...
                  I suppose!

                  As always...
                  ~Laura~

                • Poetic Dan

                  This could be me on any day, I feel could of even read it to a friend who passed in head 20s making midnight deliveries.

                  To the point, like all things should be because after that it's just a black mystery!

                  Great stuff as ever!

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                    Dan,

                    thanks mate; it is a novel idea but yes it can relate to me also on most days of the week. The thought of going dark is quite appealing.

                    Appreciate the read,

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                    • Poetic Dan

                      Miss wording there, I could say it is late but it's just me! I never see the mistakes till after, go figure ;)

                      Keep up the write man!

                    • Goldfinch60

                      Unsub,

                      That 'shot from the dark' can happen at any time but when it does happen the team will become stronger and move forward from 'the dark' and continue into the light with trust and respect for those who are together following your lead.
                      It happens in many different ways but to give up is not the way, I haven't given up MY life as my lover falls ever deeper into her world of dementia. I am stronger and moving forward in my life.
                      One may have been shot down but you and the others must keep moving forward to respect his courage.
                      It may not be easy but it is the best way.

                      Andy

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                        Andy,

                        I’m going to begin work in this novel. Having read my poem a few more times I have a multitude of ideas to spring it into action.

                        Thanks

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                        • Goldfinch60

                          That sounds like a great idea, be pleased to read it next week when you have finished it. LOL

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                        • orchidee

                          Oh woe! it all went wrong for me. I shot myself in the foot! Just commenting on this actual poem, not wanting to get entangled in the other 'stuff', nor metaphorically shooting myself in the foot (long word there! lol).

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                            Orchidee,

                            So what are you saying about my poem then. Just that you shot yourself in the foot?

                            We need to ensure that comments are based on the poem & that issues elsewhere are no longer mentioned. It’s all I’ve wanted.

                            I hope going forward that comments will be helpful & informative & hopefully positive but I can take negative if constructive. I’m still learning myself.

                            Regards

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                            • orchidee

                              Nope, not referring to me. Just a daft comment from me, lightening the theme of the poem maybe.

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                            • SabreLi

                              This is a powerful piece which can resonate with many people about many situations. I myself can relate to it in a personal way, much like many of the other commenters.

                              On a seperate note, it seems I missed alot of drama during my MPS break - I'm glad I missed it, though frustrated that it seems we lost some good contributors. Writing is many an escape and safe haven, I hope it can stay this way

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                                SabreLi,

                                indeed this one has many ways to be interpreted. Thanks for that observation.

                                On your separate note: you have missed a lot & yes we have lost a few good people through the actions of lesser good ones! Be careful who you trust on this site; not all are as they appear to be & some have multiple accounts to help keep an infux of comments to satisfy their own egos.

                                regards

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