Alan .S. Jeeves

Inside a darkened room

A darkened room knows no sorrow

No today and no tomorrow;

A darkened room has no sadness

Has no pain only madness.


A darkened room has no light

Has no moon or starlight bright;

A darkened room has no shine

Has no lustre, yours or mine.


A darkened room has no good

Has no heartbeat, has no blood;

A darkened room has no breath

Has no life but only death.


A darkened room has no style

Has no simper, has no smile;

A darkened room has no grin

Has no easiness within.


A darkened room has no day

No opinion, has no say;

A darkened room has no eve

Has no reason to believe.


A darkened room has no PC

Has no he or has no she;

A darkened room has no view

Has no me or has no you.






  • Goldfinch60

    Those darkened rooms were with me once but a knocked a hole in each of them and all are now flooded with light.
    Good write Alan.

    • Alan .S. Jeeves

      Good to hear from you Andy. Let there be light.

      Ex animo, Alan

    • orchidee

      A fine write Alan. People have to go and lie down in such a room after they hear me singing though. Can't be helped! heehee.

      • Alan .S. Jeeves

        I'm having non of it Steve. You are a fine singer ~ I have heard you sing from here in Yorks.

        Ex animo, Alan

      • Fay Slimm

        What a compelling read Alan - - you capture so well the black effects left behind when light of love is shut out of life. A powerful poem indeed.

        • Alan .S. Jeeves

          Thank you for reading Fay, you understand poetry so well. MPS is indeed fortunate to benefit from your wonderful poetry and comments/advise.

          Ex animo, Alan

        • dusk arising

          Nicely written piece but i found your accompanying note far more powerful. Just a few lines can say so much and with such power.

          • Alan .S. Jeeves

            Hello and thank you DA. I hope that you managed to get something for yourself out of my poem. If we can change someone's day a little then that's ok.

            Kind regards, Alan

          • Clara

            I really like this one Alan.
            Described as something to be avoided at all costs. Yet, seems oddly inviting. Interesting indeed.
            As the song goes "hello darkness my old friend"
            Great work!

            • Alan .S. Jeeves

              Glad that you like Clara. It is easy to enter a darkened room but more difficult to find the doorway out. Best not go there in the first place.

              Kind regards, Alan

            • Maxine Smith

              A descriptive piece.

              I felt I could visualise with each word you wrote.

              I often feel trapped in that dark place inside my head, feeling like there’s no way out.

              Luckily when I look at my kids, they give me every way out and more. My lucky therapy.

              A great read Alan, nicely done.

              • Alan .S. Jeeves

                Thank you for being here today Maxine. I appreciate your comments very much. Please re-read and remember 'Comment from author'.
                Here is a quotation that you may like:-
                "Take from the past only that which is good" ~ Paul Kruger (late 19th. century president of Transvaal, S.A.)

                Kind regards, Alan

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