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Calamity

Emptiness shrieks through the bowels of silence

Breaking the peace as utter havoc runs rampantly free

A once still calmness is now a deafening calamity

 

Shallow memories bubble through the tarmac

As acid-swathed hands of resentment crawl through busted seams

Bringing to life horrors from the darkest of haunting dreams

 

Eyes sting in the smoke-filled chamber of my mind

Delivering a myriad of images designed to confuse

I die without hope, hanging by this choking rope

 

Hands burn in the bile-filled contents of my heart

Rendering me helpless to an insane moment of pain

I die without hope, swinging from the hangman’s rope

 

Threatening under the pronged hood of regret

Stand alarming realisations of a tormented past

Shrouded in the mist of misery, determined to last

 

Treachery of the host festering deep within the psyche

Corrodes in hues of green putrid remnants of disease

The shadows crawl on hands & knees offering no release

 

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Comments14

  • Alan .S. Jeeves

    Darkness prevails again Dan. You must play much in a minor key. You found some good words here.

    Ex animo, Alan

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      Alan,

      Not sure where the all this darkness is coming from because I'm in great mood & life is good; but it seems I can turn on the darkness like a tap when I want to. So don't worry about me I'm good.

      Thanks for the visit,

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    • Saxon Crow

      Perfectly dark my friend. Totally appreciate it.

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        Saxon,

        it has come out darker than first intended! I'm ok with that as I prefer to write darker pieces.

        Thanks for the read & comment my friend,

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      • Michael Edwards

        It's dark when there's no light
        that's the trouble with the night.

        And this is dark - great write Unsub.

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          ME,

          maybe I should offer a lantern to the readers before they embark into the abyss with me.

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          • Goldfinch60

            Now come on Unsub, I provide the lanterns!!

          • orchidee

            Looks a bit like Lazarus to me - and Jesus raised him from the dead! Or Curse of the Mummy's Tomb!
            That guy could be saying: 'I'd like to help you out, but I'm a bit wrapped up with things at the moment!' lol.

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              orchi,

              very good Orchi!

              LOL!

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            • dusk arising

              This is you at your best m8. So well written.

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                Dusk,

                High praise indeed! I’ll accept it!

                Thanks

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              • myself and me

                Holly darkness, what a read.

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                  M&M,

                  Glad you had fun reading it.

                  Thanks as always,

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                • Goldfinch60

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                  This is certainly one of your darkest and finest dark poems but you have left me a crack to explore:

                  "Shallow memories bubble through the tarmac"

                  Those bubbles can only go upwards and there above is the light that will pervade your life.

                  Andy

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                    Andy,

                    Loved the lanterns comment on the other piece. Apologies for forgetting the lanterns role is yours & I should ask permission before providing any! Lol!

                    Those bubbles were released at night & it was a cloudy night with no moon. So it was quite dark! Lol!

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                  • LAWLESS

                    Christ! I almost puked while reading this. Your most repulsive piece to date.

                    I know you’ll take that as the highest praise I’ve ever given you!

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                      Lawless,

                      I puke every time I see a notification with your name attached to it!

                      Appreciate your beautiful comment!

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                    • TWENTY3

                      this is very dark and has a weird but appropriate image to go with it. i do like dark poems and this is probably one of the darkest i have ver read. its a song isnt it. the chrous is blatant and clealy taken from a different angle to the rest of the words

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                        23,

                        Yes it is a song lyric. I tend to write mostly lyrics but hope they can be read as a poem too without the need of a musical accompaniment.

                        Appreciate the read & comment.

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                      • Dove

                        If darkness could get any darker
                        I would be blind, you did a great
                        Job of adding life to the bleakness
                        And opening my eyes to the dark side!
                        Some great lines!

                        Getting my flashlight out, so I can find
                        My way out!

                        Enjoyed the read!

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                          Dove,

                          This is a pretty dark piece which represented my mood when writing. Then I turned in the light & wrote & light infused love poem which I quickly put in the bin.

                          Good luck getting out safely!

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                        • Jason Vancelette (AKA Pharaoh33)

                          Wow..you have a huge following on this site my friend. Thus one was great...very dark and foreboding..you better not die while hanging..you are one of my only fans on this damned site..lmao..good work.as always

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                            33,

                            My following are mostly enemies who don’t comment but send me rude & abusive private messages. I shall publish them all one day & name & shame accordingly!

                            I’m your only fan? Well one good friend is better than 100 hangers on!

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                          • tundrol

                            Nice ideas, subtly poetic, interestingly subversive. Would play well in a verbal presentation, I think.Personally, I would introduce more discipline, but that's just me.

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                              tundrol,

                              really appreciate the feedback. If you have time would you be kind enough to expand on the discipline aspect. Thank you kindly,

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                            • tundrol

                              Sure. Your poetry is full of anarchic energy: I believe discipline would give a nice contrast to set it off, so the easiest way to do that is metricate it. Contrasting structure and content, discipline and anarchy. But that's just my thoughts on the matter. There may well be other reasons, other ways, other priorities. Anyway, have fun!

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                                Tundrol,

                                this is the best honest advice I've been given here on MPS. I am indebted to you for this insight.

                                Many many thanks indeed,

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                              • Sanjana Varma

                                I am in love with this piece. There is anguish and murkiness. Just great!

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                                  Sanjana,

                                  so glad you enjoyed this one. I'm more at home with these darker writes.

                                  Thank you for your kind words

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                                  • Sanjana Varma

                                    So am I ! Hoping to read more darkalicious poems from you.



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