What's better than gold?
A heart of gold and any golden rule
Thus donot over the mined thing drool.
What's better than pearls?
Any pearls of wisdom
grant the oyster some freedom!
What's better than diamonds
Heavenly Supernovas and stars that dazzle like them
So don't you fret if you can't afford
the earthly underground gem.
What's better than rubies?
Crimson roses and rosy lips
I do and maybe you too already have them!
What's better than emeralds?
Feline eyes glowing in the dark.
Ah Lord! That fluorescent emerald spark!
What's better than silver?
The hope that every cloud has a silver lining
Even miners they don't enjoy the mining.
What's better than amber?
Amber eyes shining like embers.
In God's design variety of eyeball shades
Ah and the licorice eyed maidens and maids!
And whether it be zircon or amethyst
Sapphire or lapis lazuli
Agate, opal or tanzanite
what tis far better
than all these gems put together
is anyone known as 'a gem of a person'.
For instance it's upto you to transcend flesh and blood and be a guiding star for the transient travellers that we are.
The dust that man is famously created from
can really be upgraded to stardust if you are a shining star in God's eyes.
And If you are kind you are a gem of a person in the view of the Creator
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Author:
S.zaynab.M.V.Kamoonpury (Pseudonym) (
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a multi-faceted gem of a poem..
Thanks soo much for a bright brill comment, ,multifaceted goes well with my poem on various gems and their other literary usages. Best wishes,
Heaven has eyes now? What stuff has been taught to you i#m wondering.
Other than the last two lines i found this an excellent piece.
Hmm I thought I shouldn't repeat God twice in one line , though I have seen heaven used synonymously with God like when poets write, " and heaven heard my cries or heaven saw my plight, it's just being poetic. But I will change it to another name for God, .
The last line calls any and all kind persons as gem of a person, we need more kind people in the world. Thanks soo much for your thoughts!
I thought it a shame that you brought any religion into the piece because all the values described so well existed long before man invented religion. They are after all facets of humanity.
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Awesome poem. I love that you focus on the true riches in life from many difgerent perspectives. Brilliant poem!
Thanks soo much for a cool super comment poet! Best wishes!
A beautiful string of reasons for shining like gems while we have life and breath. This poetic jewel is very inspiring - It goes now into my favourites and thank you for sharing it.
Hi dearest Fay my warmest thanks for your lovely sweet kind golden hearted feedback! Take care! 🌷
HI FRIEND ~ BRIAN HERE ! I love every word of your exquisite Poem. I have studied Geology and I love Gemstones. We teach Gemology @ College and it is a wonderful subject. They are beautiful in their rough state and even more beautiful when they are cut & polished ~ just as people are. I have a collection of semi-precious gemstones which I use to give talks to Seniors (60+). Every Gemstone you mention has its own *Quality & Mystique*. They all have their own application in Jewelry & Religion. I like the way you mention the Spiritual Aspect of Gemstones in your elegant *ODE to GEMSTONES*. Many of them are mentioned in our Holy Book the BIBLE. Each of us are like *Gemstones* and we can be honed & polished ~ as your poem suggests ~ and fitted for Gods Service. Thanks for caring & sharing ~ We have saved it as a Fave ~ AMEN !
Blessings & Peace & Joy
Love BRIAN & ANGELA
💛🤍🧡💚💙💜🤎
Hey you adorable couple Brian and Angela, thanks soo much and warmest regards, your comment and thoughts are sparkling as pearls of wisdom themselves, very interesting what you say, yes gems are a great creation of God too and yes we should try to polish ourselves for our own betterment yeahh. My all admiration for your words. Blessings and best wishes.
There's a lot of beauty in this poem: Comparisons that are heart-felt, the value of human consideration over sparkling gems, and the transient nature of mankind.
However, let me say this knowing I and everyone else is guilty of this, your poem would be all the more powerful if reduced down to its basic elements. Consider this: just the first two lines of each stanza, and even those somewhat condensed, and the final stanza cut to just one line.
Although the rest are beautiful words they do not add to what you were trying to achieve.
A beautiful poem none the less but more powerful if cut to the quick. - Phil A.
Ah yes lengthy volume is my weakness, but for clarity and message I have to go to some lengths lol pun intended, I mean I have to say some related things, I didn't actually digress for instance kindness makes a person a gem in God's eyes so all related right. I should try to edit and shorten the lines in future though. Thanks ever so much for your fine comment and great constructive criticism. Cheers !
And through kindness hearts are owned, very well written 🌹
Yes yes true, kindness is to live by, should be the norm. Thanks for your great comment! Cheers!
What a gem of a poem, S. Zaynab. Hongera! You do such a marvellous job of replacing those "precious" metals that many of us worship, with precious qualities most should aspire to. Thoroughly enjoyed this and thank you for sharing.
Aw thanks soo much for such bright wise thoughts on my poem, and thanks for the Kiswahili congrats, not my mother tongue as is Urdu but I have learnt it now . Best wishes!
What a gem of a poem this is. Very heartfelt and well-written.
Aw warmest thanks for that sweet lovely comment, like your name too, quite unique! 🌷
This is a great write my friend, brilliant work!
Thanks ever soo much for the feedback ! Best wishes,
Wow! Love the many 'cuts' of this poem!
Thanks soo much for that nice comment Clever and apt! Cheers!
The series of questioning aptly and fittingly resolves in the last line of this piece: the Creator. The Creator is infinitely better than even the most beautiful gem known as Miss Universe (and don't we scour the world looking for her most every year?) When I look at my Lord I look at the pinnacle; the apex of ALL that IS (beautiful). Enjoyed reading and contemplating beauty SZK.
Thanks so much for a great lofty unique comment! Stay safe!
Hello S.zaynab,
A beautiful poem with sparkling gems of wisdom.
Keep writing and safe & healthy during these difficult times.
FineB
My warmest thanks for your lovely nice comment! Do take care and stay safe and write more poems with your fine pen.. ☺️🌷
Awesome! Beautiful! I enjoy your descriptions so much. Great work!
Thanks soo much for your super fine comment. Means a lot coming from a great poet like you. Stay safe , best wishes!
wonderfully written, imbued with so much passion and packed with creative metaphors
I like this poem 🙂nice words !
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