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Ledge

My memory recalls that angry fight

When we argued late into the night

The words you said hurt me so much

My time will come to put things right

 

My thoughts became so confused

When you spoke to me & accused

The words you said hurt me so much

& so we became yesterday’s news

 

With a false sense of security

You followed me & stood out on the ledge

With a wink & a trusting smile

I held you tight before pushing you off the edge

 

My memory recalls the rip in my heart

I broke in half & was left at the start

The words you said hurt me so much

I was so numb when you turned to depart

 

My thoughts revolved around revenge

The scar across my heart I had to avenge

The words you said hurt me too much

At the ledge, I knew our lives would end

 

With a false sense of insecurity

I walked out & looked from the ledge

With a tear & a guilty smile

I took a step forward then jumped off the edge

 

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Comments7

  • Saxon Crow

    .... And flew

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      Saxon,

      I didn't say how high the ledge was; was it? 200 feet or just a step?

      Thanks for 'dropping' in!

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      • Saxon Crow

        I see what you did there!

      • dusk arising

        Look mate, the view from there was great and she was gone, you'll never have that moment again....DON'T JUMP...... fly.... now is the time to soar.....

        This time your work takes us to the edge with a very entertaining scenario. Personally when pushed like that by a lady i just walk away and am not seen again. Leave them to their own destiny, my life is too precious to be ruined by another person by doing something i would be punished for (note, i did not say regret).

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          Dusky,

          the view was awesome. They say Red Bull gives you wings...now it is that truth or advertising lies...let's find out!








          ...it was a lie!

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        • orchidee

          Did she fall or was she pushed?!

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            orchi,

            I quote from the poem you've just read obviously too quickly:

            "With a wink & a trusting smile

            I held you tight before pushing you off the edge"

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            • orchidee

              I think I read that bit, but still wondered if she jumped?!
              I'm walking close to a cliff edge, but it's OK - I won't fall over the eeeedddddgggggeeeeee!! Good acting, innit?

            • ANGELA & BRIAN

              ANGELA HERE - Good Evening UNSUB - thanks for sharing a very salutary poem. What starts as simple row can push us to the edge. A false sense of security led her to edge after the row - but it wasnt over - after an *embrace* he pushed her over to (judging by the visiual !) her certain death. The result was two unecessary deaths - Murder & Suicide ! Death by Words (verse 1). Line 3 *The words you said hurt me so much* is repeated in Verse 2 & 4 and then (as if to justify the push to death) becomes *The words you said hurt me TOO much* *At the edge I knew our lives would end* Sometimes it is the extra word (or unfaithful act) that tips a relationship over the edge ! Brian & I have had an excellent & understanding relationship so far ! BUT in a MONTH we*ll be married and living about 14 hours a day under the smae roof ! Watch this space - but there are no steep cliffs in Essex. My Friend Paul in his letter to Ephesus says *Settle your arguments before the setting of the Sun !* Good advice in my experience ~ the longer an argument goes on the more viscious it gets. *The words you said hurt me TOO much !* Brian and I are taking possession of our first Home on Saturday 21st March I am sure sparks will fly over choice of Wallpaper & Wall colour & Curtains & Carpets - designing the Garden etc etc - However Im sure our mutual love is strong enough to keep us well away from the edge *Watch this Space* Thanks for scaring - your Odd Ode sure made me think !

              Love Joy & Peace to You & Yours
              Blessings Angela & Brian 🧡🤍💙🤍🧡

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                B&A,

                thank you for your response.

                I will point out that Essex is bigger than Wickford; you'll find that Walton-on-the-Naze is indeed in Essex & has cliff edges. There are many more but just thought I'd let you know that cliffs do exist in Essex. I've lived there for 20 years & being a keen walker I have walked many of them.

                No idea who Paul or Ephesus is.

                "BUT in a MONTH we*ll be married and living about 14 hours a day under the smae roof ! Watch this space - but there are no steep cliffs in Essex. ~ Brian and I are taking possession of our first Home on Saturday 21st March I am sure sparks will fly over choice of Wallpaper & Wall colour & Curtains & Carpets - designing the Garden etc etc - However Im sure our mutual love is strong enough to keep us well away from the edge *Watch this Space*

                Yet again you feel the need to use your comment on my poem to announce yet again that you’re getting married. I really do not hear it this anymore as you use this forum to announce your weeding & house purchase & salaries, & your jobs blah blah blah! I do not wish to watch this space as you suggest as it seems MPS is your space for reminding us every day of your wedding. I know when it is & I know your house etc…to be honest I never wanted to know about it as this is a poetry forum not the B&A Blog site.

                Can I kindly ask you to keep specifically to my written poem in your comments & refrain from using MY page to advertise your lives.

                Kindest regards

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              • myself and me

                A relief for both.

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                  M&M,

                  a relief for everybody I think! LOL!

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                • Goldfinch60

                  That jump may or may not have been real but it took you both into that eternity of togetherness forever.

                  Andy

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                    Andy,

                    not sure this individual really wanted to end up with her again & for eternity!!

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                  • Laura

                    Unsub,

                    This impressive and powerful write is
                    relatable on so many levels!

                    Wounds may heal,
                    but scars will remain.

                    —a wink & a trusting smile—
                    A widely chosen weapon to avenge that “scar across” your heart!

                    When you finally took that
                    “step forward” and
                    “jumped off the edge”,
                    you empowered yourself to take control of your life and live it the way you wanted to.

                    ~Laura~🌻

                    N.B.- In my comments, I’m using the pronouns ‘you’ & ‘your’ in a generic sense. I don’t want to assume that these lyrics are about you!
                    And if they are, more power to you!



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