Aesthetically challenged
intellectually limited
educationally unequipped
but rich in human resources
confidence bloated
opinions misguided
humor derided
but full of empathetic insight
foolish, to surmise
what values must we prize
in our mind’s mirror
of self-distorted reflections;
even those lost causes of society
were once vessels of the hopeful light of infancy
empowered to nourish
those gazing upon their innocent forms.
Incalculable, the impact
a shallow stream has
on the survival
of its surrounding wildlife
immeasurable, the impact
our pebble can make
with the tiny ripples it creates
when surging bravely: across the rivers of its fate.
© L. B. Mek
January 2020
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A finely worded piece of wisdom in these lines my friend -- our pebble when thrown to create ripples can indeed change the tide of fate. Into my favourites with this little gem.
thank you, sometimes its the less ambitious writes that can engage readers in a more worthwhile way
I aesthetically, intellectually, and educationally like this. I'm waffling now - or gushing in praise! lol.
well, I enthusiastically appreciate your kind support, thanks
An absorbing write so elequently expressed.
thanks Michael, always a good thing when we can supplement the shrinking pool of positivity in each others mindset's
sounds like me,,lol
i enjoyed the read
that's great and I'm glad you liked it
you`re welcome
Love these lines ! Arranged to Haiku
values must we prize
self-distorted reflections;
in our mind’s mirrors
Love your last line as well!
Rivers of fate!
Imagine what ripples
a tossed pebble elicits
brilliant!
glad you connected with it enough to spend a little time reimagining its layout
really appreciate your encouraging and creative feedback, it would never have occurred to me to try and rework my words into Haiku's
It ca be the little things in our lives that can have the most profound effect on them.
Andy
so very true Andy, thanks for encapsulating the message I was trying to convey into one perfect sentence.
Sublime poetic expression. Your words seem to take me to a new place.
Thanks
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LB,
I just love a poem that needs a second read to fully immerse yourself in & find those images & directions.
I actually read it 5 times & each read gave me a new perspective.
Each stanza could easily be a poem on its own.
Particularly enjoyed:
"immeasurable, the impact
our pebble can make
with the tiny ripples it creates
when surging bravely: across the rivers of its fate".
Perfect!
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wow, so humbled! really appreciate your supportive comments Unsub
thank you!
Bam what a gem! Right up to the end, keep skipping thoses stones! Each ripple is perfect
Much peace and respect
Thank you for the support, really appreciate it!
I like the impact of pebbles analogy in metaphor how you summed up your poem. A fabulous poetic free verse in great meter and rhythm. Kudos.
Plz do read and comment my newest poem too.
thank you, I will definitely visit your page
apart from the fact I feel compelled to point out that you have penned a belter here, and I do mean that .. filled with sage wisdom as it is ..
I must confess I feel as if I have lost a period of undetermined time, because I can not fathom how I could have missed this page and its content until only just now ...
Neville
nature has a way of delivering the words we need, at the time we need them... maybe, that or you were just busy, lol
I too lurk amongst your past uploads and am so glad at technologies gift of archived accessibility to brilliance,
truly appreciate your unfailing support my friend, your encouragement is priceless
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