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Existence

You've gone

left me nothing

well not nothing

a broken heart

thanks for that

I'll keep it safe

as a memory

of what was

& what wasn't

no future

just no point

not anymore

 

My pointless existence

Can't fight the resistance

Watching my life travel

Far away into the distance

 

My worthless existence

No strength for persistence

Watching my life travel

Far off into the distance

 

You've left

gave me nothing

well not nothing

an empty heart

thanks for that

I'll treasure it

as a reminder

of what was

& what wasn't

no future

just no point

not anymore

 

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Comments8

  • dusk arising

    Oh i'd hate to be left with hope. Gimmie the broken heart option any day. Keep me away from the cutlery drawer until i can bear the sunlight on my face again.

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      Dusky,

      hope is very over-rated. I don't actually have a broken heart but I'll get you one from eBay & send it on.

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      • dusk arising

        I had one but it faded.... they really aren't worth the hassle. I avoid going near them these days.

      • orchidee

        It's all my fault! I knew I should never have started singing, and inflict torment on so many. I left you nothing, etc, etc. lol.

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          Orchi,

          yup, you are to blame for everything.

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          ps. you did leave me with ear ache though!

        • ANGELA & BRIAN

          ANGELA HERE - Good Afternoon UNSUB. This is indeed Un Poeme Noir ! However it reminds us to *Count our Blessings* in the Good Times. Brian & I hope for 40 years together (77 & 72 !) But we have been taught to CARPE DIEM and not boast about Tomorrow ! WE all know our Lives can be shattered in an instant and we have seen it happen to Friends in our age group (30 ~ 40). Broken Marriages & Broken Lives. Most have coped but some have given up on life itself ~ so tragic ! Brian & I wake up each day and like GOLDFINCH we believe whatever happens in this LIFE we will be reunited in the SPIRIT WORLD ~ Amen. Thanks for reminding us that everything in this LIFE is transient !

          Love Peace & Joy to You & Yours
          Angela - Brian & Smokey ! ! !

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            A&B,

            this is just a piece I wrote that does not reflect in any way my life or current situation - I just prefer to write less positive pieces.

            Thanks,

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          • Fay Slimm.

            An empty heart and so well described that I felt the anguish in each of your lines my friend..... a most moving read.

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              Fay,

              many thanks Fay.

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            • Romantic Bloom

              A heartfelt write ! Thanks
              for sharing

              My empty heart beats
              without any flames
              Shall I call it defeat?

              Once Love was sweet
              But you had no shame
              My empty heart beats

              As the blood drained to my feet
              Only embers remained
              Shall I call it defeat?

              Your truths so incomplete
              Your lies even more lame
              My empty heart beats

              like a city without any streets
              or a country without a name
              Shall I call it defeat ?

              Your affections were bittersweet
              Your kisses were never the same
              My empty heart beats
              Shall I call it defeat?

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                Dove,

                nice poetic response.

                Thanks

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                • Romantic Bloom

                  Thanks Unsub, for the inspiration!

                • MelissaJA

                  Another great poem. I love how this was written, like someone deep in thought and anguish

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                    MJA,

                    many thanks for dropping by to read & comment,

                    most appreciated,

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                  • Goldfinch60

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                    Very emotive words, that broken heart is with you at the moment but maybe it will be fixed once somebody else arrives with the double sided adhesive tape.

                    Andy

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                      Andy,

                      thankfully this is just fiction; fancied writing something depressing for a change!!

                      Good advice though for the broken hearted to look for a new partner who own double-sided tape. Ever thought of being a marriage counsellor?

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                    • L. B. Mek

                      impactfully emotive writing, like the layout as well

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                        LB,

                        thanks my friend,

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