I am not qualified to critique. The images are clear and to me a very positive thing. You might want to do some research on the Lune structure; I am for sure thanks for bringing it up.
https://www.writersdigest.com/write-better-poetry/poetic-form-lune
Have been somewhat perplexed with really nice "Run-ons." Just write them when they are felt and edit them into a Haiku or Senryu later often loosing something in the process. The Lune has exposed a new toy to play with. Shout out to L.B.
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bright petals
glistening eager
windswept glum,
a good read, thanks for inspiring my scribble, my first ever Lune (assuming I'm not mistaken)
I am not qualified to critique. The images are clear and to me a very positive thing. You might want to do some research on the Lune structure; I am for sure thanks for bringing it up.
https://www.writersdigest.com/write-better-poetry/poetic-form-lune
A great little gem Jerry. I too just researched a lune (thanks L. B.). This is as structurally pleasing as a cherry tree from bark to limb.
J
Have been somewhat perplexed with really nice "Run-ons." Just write them when they are felt and edit them into a Haiku or Senryu later often loosing something in the process. The Lune has exposed a new toy to play with. Shout out to L.B.
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