Out of Mind
If I cannot see you
Then you no longer exist
…
So I burn all the photos
And I delete all the texts
…
The candles are weeping
But they are suitably snuffed
…
Yet still I hope, beyond hope
That you know you are loved
…
Yes now you can go
You can do as you please
…
You can dance, you can laugh
You can love, now eternally free..
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Author:
Neville (
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You seeing me? You burnt all the pics of me?! heehee.
A fine write N.
................................. can ya blame me .. I can see write through ya ...................... Cheers
I was left reflecting upon the fact that each of my past loves elevated me and so to they must have elevated my lovers. Elevation - to ride higher than you rode before.
Your excellent words speak of letting go peacefully with understanding and acceptance. To move forward along a path as yet untrod.
Really enjoyed reading this and the thoughts it provoked - leaving me uplifted truly.
.......................................... that's what we shall call a win win ... cheers DA
'If I cannot see you
Then you no longer exist'
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'You can dance, you can laugh
You can love, now eternally free..'
worded beautifully, I really like the challenging journey depicted - in distilling, the acceptance it takes
to transmute your first two lines: into your last two..
another subtle serving of your inked brushstroke of brilliance my friend, in my humble opinion
........... thank you for indulging me my friend .. so much and always appreciated ..
Neville
A fine write, Neville.
.......... thank you Jerry
Love free of possession - the only way (though sometimes very hard) to be. I'll settle for the last three stanzas.
Great Neville.
.......... the only true and meaningful way indeed ... thank you kindly Dave .. particularly on behalf of those three stanzas ...
Neville, this is a great poem and should be hanging in every divorce lawyer's office!
............................Write said Fred ........ how very kind of ya .. see you in court said Ned ........................ 🙂
That which we have lost hurts the most. A sustained love, never equals the lost imagined one .This is the power of the mind.
The first two lines set up the imagery. Then we inject "hope" an undefined emotion and the work of the mind. And lastly, having set up the implausible we free what is not ours to let go. Yet the honesty of your emotions rings through to the reader and we know the words are spoken in sincerity. - Phil A.
.................... every now and again, it is frightening just how quickly the pen can turn, take over and usurp my imagination ...... however, having somehow managed to resume control .. I thank you my friend and on behalf of us all..................... N.
Love the line , the candles are weeping!
If only I could think that way!
“If I no longer see you, you no longer exist “
Seems I’m a creature of you are
Always in my thoughts and heart
............................................................................................. Bless ya RB ... muchly appreciated and truly tooly ........... N
Only in the physical sense, for they live on in memories
Well done, sir
............................................. spot on my friend .. they do indeed and thank you again for visiting my little scribble
Love has a way of staying in mind when its day has ended and these moving words suggest the best way to let go - honestly, hopefully and so tender...........x.
try as I might, I simply just can't thank you enough dear Fay.................... x
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