yellowrose

Star

I sit in the sleepy sky 

I am awake 

my sparkling sight shines above the talkative trees 

the sky sleeps and dreams but I am awake 

 

I am the eyes of the sky , or one of many 

thinking , seeing, awake , and tenderly curious 

of the sky and the trees talking silently below me 

 

I am a searching star 

watching my golden friends near me , and afar 

sitting in a bed of cushiony cotton wool 

above trees which sing sensitive tunes to me 

and my curious comfortable mind 

 

I am a star 

made of shimmering soft sand 

dreamy diamonds and the shining sun 

Comments7

  • orchidee

    A fine write Rose.
    Now I'm rather busy. That star seems cold at night. I get in my rocket out, go and collect it each night; bring it back to Earth and put it to bed in the warm; then return it each morning to the skies.
    How do I get time to do anything else? And what about all the other stars?
    Much more of this and I'll go potty! lol.

    • yellowrose

      Some evenings are warmer than others ... lol ... Iโ€™m sure spring and summer evenings the stars would be ok lol . In the winter and autumn they would definitely feel colder .

      That would be nice if you . Iโ€™m sure if the star had feelings and didnโ€™t like the cold .., that it would feel grateful although maybe it wouldnโ€™t like you taking it away from its home - who knows

      Thanks for the comment ๐Ÿ™‚๐Ÿ™‚

    • rrodriguez

      You're a star. Fine write with much metaphors to create an image of your time awake.

      • yellowrose

        Thankyou ๐Ÿ™‚ Iโ€™m not sure that I was talking about me ...
        I was just thinking about how a โ€œ star โ€œ might feel . Although it could be taken that way ...

        That sense of peace stirring within me ... sometimes itโ€™s there

        Thanks for the comment

        Glad you like this

        • rrodriguez

          Thank you for a fine poem. I reread it and saw the star among the stars. That's you among the glinting stars of writers.

        • rrodriguez

          Indeed, the star stays awake during the night. I reread your poem and saw the star among the stars. Still this a fine poem.

          • yellowrose

            Thankyou ๐Ÿ™‚ stars are pretty . They look peaceful and full of light ..

            We all want to feel that sense of peace and feel a lightness within ourselves . Nobody wants to feel weighed down ..,

          • Fay Slimm.

            A gem of a read again Rose..... lovely feel to your dreamy words,

            • yellowrose

              Thankyou very much , Fay ๐Ÿ™‚

            • Goldfinch60

              May your star shine on you forever as you write your fine words yellowrose.

              Andy

              • yellowrose

                Kind words ... Thankyou Andy ๐Ÿ™‚

              • Alan .S. Jeeves

                A fine poem Rose. Not too long to get the meaning of. I was a little out of breath after reading stanza 2 ~ maybe slight punctuation will enchance the stanza, say (a coma?) between 'sky' & 'and' in line 3.
                Kind regards, Alan

              • Munro

                Thatโ€™s two today and they are both beautiful ,,



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