Teddy.15

Her Withering Petal

The spirit of cupid does stir
with both moon and sun, she sits so frail
her hope has worn down to her stem
she has no story left to tell

 

In her mind, love has lied
her Darling, nowhere to be found

her heart, a dark shadowed forest
haunted by aching images

 

Blue roses weeping
her exhausted thoughts.

Comments6

  • yellowrose

    Beautiful words 🙂 although sad . I like this poem

    • Teddy.15

      Thank you, it is sad but it isn't a reflection of me, I just love writing all types. I'm honoured you like it.

    • orchidee

      Good write Teddy.
      Oohh, I'll come back then, and then she'll be OK! heehee.

      • Teddy.15

        (giggle) thank you.

      • Doggerel Dave

        I assume you know Rudyard Kipling's Blue Roses, Teddy. This the rebuttal?

        • Teddy.15

          Well I shall take this as a huge compliment, I\'ve never read Kipling\'s blue roses, I will have a look, this poem is all me, an idea of how as a womens thoughts could be put into a verse of a rose, as indeed I am an English rose. (Now I\'m blushing) thank you.

        • Candlewitch

          hello Teddy,

          this poem is so lovely and expressive that I had to read it twice for pure enjoyment!

          *smiles, Cat

          • Teddy.15

            Dear Cat, what an amazing suprise to see you, i am thrilled.

          • Goldfinch60

            May that weeping soon be renewed with new love and her flower rises into full beautiful bloom once more.
            Beautiful words Teddy.

            Andy

            • Teddy.15

              thank you, you really undertood the meaning, which means so much.

            • L. B. Mek

              intricate, yet - wisely, worded accessibly relatable
              so now that intimacy - imbued, within each pause of breath
              paced, to match that surreal of belated realisation
              is surrendered for us readers to wear, as if - a second skin
              left whirling, within this inked sea of heartache
              we recognise - as-if, its depicting our own yesteryear reality..
              brilliantly executed, flow and tone combining to create such a memorable read!
              thanks for sharing

              • Teddy.15

                wow, thank you for another gorgeous review.



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