HannahElisabeth

Marionette


Notice of absence from HannahElisabeth
Taking a long overdue mental health vacation. I will check in when I can.

 

Make me dance with your strings

 

Nothing ever given fully

 

Strings you call love

 

But conditionally

 

Bend us

 

To your will for fun

 

Wrapped around your finger

 

Your love is like a loaded gun

 

And you learned quick to pull the trigger

Comments4

  • Neil Higgins

    Families are a funny brood.We love them Hate them( sometimes) Inspire them.Help them.Mis understand them.Infuriate them.Shout,cry,laugh,stare blankly,and whisper dreams we can not keep.Yet to walk away takes courage and understanding of everything that has been tried and reached its end conclusion.
    To feel as though we are being made to dance with strings is something a lot of us surely feel,when under peer or other forces pressure.

    • HannahElisabeth

      You're quite right, while I'm thankful that I wouldn't be who I am today without them, I'm definitely better off without some of them. As painful as it was. But hey, at least I could turn it into something productive. At least I'd like to think so.

    • Heart of Babel

      I think one of the most interesting things to me is the word love in conjunction with the word conditional. Obviously the dictionary has various definitions to describe the word love, but when it comes to that of the heart, I always feel like there is only one. To which you either have love or you have not.

      I think that is why when the conditional element gets added, it is so powerful and impacting to my understanding. Because at the introduction of condition, love is dissolved. It then becomes a performance piece, exactly like the theme of your poem, a marionette, a calculated manipulation to meet the demands of self-service. It is a really appalling and a messed up thing to have to experience, utterly terrible, in fact.

      Just the stark contrast, where my idea of love is entirely based on selflessness, the deliberate intention and choice to be selfless for another, sacrificial to a degree, the marionette is otherworldly to that paradigm. It is a radical and quite traumatic shift.

      Needless to say, what your writing portrays is near to perfection. Absolutely superb.

      • HannahElisabeth

        Thank you kindly! That's precisely the point, it wasn't love at all. More like a means to an end, and if you don't keep up the performance, the consequences are severe. At the very least, it taught me what love is not. For that, I'm thankful.

      • Coyote

        I'm really liking your style Hannah. Your poems are concise and direct yet never feel rushed. You right about things so relatable that the reader can easily put themself in your place and feel the emotion that flows from every line. Excellent writeπŸ™‚

        • HannahElisabeth

          Thank you Coyote, same to you. I think that's why your poetry resonates so much with me πŸ™‚

        • Doggerel Dave

          Shorty for a change:

          Dysfunctional families everywhere -
          It's power, not love which is hard to bear.

          • HannahElisabeth

            Generational trauma is no joke, but when I dedicate my dissertation to them, it will be πŸ˜‰

            • Doggerel Dave

              Let me know, please.



            To be able to comment and rate this poem, you must be registered. Register here or if you are already registered, login here.