The gentle breeze,
working to soften & appease
the angry heat
at the height of summer,
is much like love.
The arduous & gruelling crawl
of miniscule
insects
trying to return to their nests,
is much like negotiating
the sea
of dull humanity,
the traffic of passion;
to get to you.
Colour saturating the blank canvas,
bleeding into the thick paper;
creating landscapes or
abstract visions & dreams,
is much like your succulent smile;
revealing more than you care to admit,
when you think it’s full of guile,
but actually
it’s travelled through the final mile
from your eyes to mine
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wonderful imagery!
indeed, so much of attraction
comes down to that 'final mile'
in a fleetingly shared, 'enticing smile'
of our magnetically instinctive, communication
and its gift of a meaningful: connection...
(another, unapologetic - modern ode
to that romantic wondrousness of love
thanks for sharing, dear poet)
Haha I know I should write about something other than love...maybe...one day...probs not. But it's so boundlessly fascinating to me. There is so little I understand about anything. I don't have a discerning eye to turn upon many things. I feel my frequent state is one of constant astonishment. Like that wonderful lyric 'how strange it is to be anything at all...'
I rather read a lifetime of meaningful love poetry
than a single, 'wannabe' pseudo artistic depiction
of ............
do - you, dear poet! always
live no room for belated regret 💪😎
❤️
Lovely words , Becky ! 🙂🙂 beautiful poem .
I think I have wrote about love once although I havnt been in love before .
Ah I don't know if I am in love yet & if I am, it's a secret, but my poetry keeps giving me away haha. Love is different for everyone. Here's a wonderful poem on that theme:
https://wordsforghosts.com/2019/04/04/mi-fea-eres-una-castana-despeinda/
Thanks .. I will take a look later
This is one I wrote around unrequited love not from experience , just from poetry prompt
https://cosmofunnel.com/poems/unrequited-love-148944
Well .., you could be on your way to being in love with him lol ... but it’s a lovely poem ) it is different
Ah it's beautiful:
'why do i have to feel this way
about someone who never thinks about me?'
So true! Sometimes it can be self-destructive like that. But just sometimes... you think about them & it's delicious & you don't even worry what they think about ❤
Aha yes I could be - but I must not tell him haha:
https://youtu.be/4y3O8jvZwLM
I just read the poem ... I like it apart from the bit with the word “ piss “ lol I think it might have affected the nice sound of the poem .
It was well expressed and I do understand what it was trying to say . We can love someone even with their imperfections and negative traits . Good poem I guess
Haha yes, but I think that was important. Love poems often focus on our virtues & not our vices & can often be unrealistic - but you have to take it all with love. Love is loving everything
An excellent write I could feel this gem of a poem..
Thank you so much ❤
A great poem that creates many images and emotions. Best Wishes
Thank you my friend ❤
"it’s travelled through the final mile
from your eyes to mine"
Marvelous.
Ah thank you so much! You're too kind ❤
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