Standing on the rooftop
looking at the surroundings for the last time.
Saving everything on her mind
and keep it, before she’ll close her eyes.
This is it!
Today is the last chapter of her life.
She is now closing the last page of her book
to end her sorrow and her afflictions.
This will become a memory,
a very painful one for the one’s that loved her.
And now she leaps and falling freely
to escape from this world, eternally.
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Author:
MalayangIbon (Pseudonym) (
Offline) - Published: September 5th, 2021 08:01
- Comment from author about the poem: (I want to apologize for the grammatical errors.)
- Category: Sad
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Comments1
leap to where?
'Anywhere, but here!'
are the words, of a short-sighted temporary mindset...
if this is a dedication to a fallen victim
then I offer you my sympathy, while
adding, you could have worded this in past tense
(eg. 'she leapt')
but if this is a poetic expression of someone's feelings
of hopelessness and depression, then your tone is alarming
(in my humble opinion)..
pain is a certainty in life, and no one
can judge wat your pain limits 'should be'! however
your writing glamourizes: imagery of 'ending life'
as if its a one way escape?
How selfish, that artistic perspective is
so many have to pay, for someone's 'attempt' at an ending
and what guarantee, does anyone have?
Tell me, honestly
with the will and fight it takes, to give-in
could you not, try and call-out for help
a few more times
admittedly this internet, has been warped
into a cesspool of everything inhumane
but aren't there still, so many tether's to hope it provides?
( https://togetherweare-strong.tumblr.com/helpline )
Thank you so much.
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