We'd been at sea for many weeks
the toll bell sang our woes.
When at last, our eyes did spy
safe harbor from seaward throes.
Through the fog, the lighthouse rose
pale light sat upon its peak.
Then a blinding flash of light
and all of our sights went weak.
Day 1
When we awoke we rose to find
events of both wonder and dread.
Me and my crew, three dozen strong
stood wondering where we were led.
A vast misty island
spanned before us
We saw hills and rivers
Valleys and forests.
And all the while
we cried in our exile
We were trapped here
in this land out of reach.
For in the night
the tide felt fright.
It fled,
leaving our ship beached.
That day we sent out parties
to search for water and wood.
We weren't prepared,
when they spoke to us scared
Hearing noises they wouldn't describe if they could.
Day 2
On day two, my first mate Drew
spoke to me most concerned.
He felt a gaze beyond the haze,
I worried when one party didn't return.
Day 3
On third nightfall,
I thought I saw
In my weariness through lack of sleep.
There seemed to be,
near the forest of trees
Something lurking where the dark woods creep.
The sight of it standing there,
chilled my bones
The figure suddenly arcked
When it screamed,
we all knew
The lot of us had been marked
I'll never forget that horrid sound
nor the reply that soon after was heard,
The thought that we are here alone,
now seems quite absurd.
Day 4
I didn't sleep that night of course,
Just sat in the ship with my gun.
Of the search parties we send out,
we're now only down to one.
Day 8
They're getting closer to the ship,
I think the fog's returning.
Every night I hear their cries,
We must keep the fires burning!
Day .........
They're all gone now,
my crew, my friends
Into the night they went.
And on this ship,
gun in hand
Went the days that I have spent.
This wood soaked tomb,
this smelly bog
Is where I'll surely die
I hear the screams
they know I'm near
Oh god! Don't let them hear my cries!
- Author: Jack Cohen (Pseudonym) ( Offline)
- Published: October 4th, 2021 20:50
- Comment from author about the poem: I tried to do something a little different here, play around with the formatting, change up the writing tempos, really trying to capture that feeling of losing one's hope and sanity. Let me know what you thought or how I could improve!
- Category: Gothic
- Views: 15
Comments1
'Day.....
They're all
gone,
my crew, my friends
Into the night they went.
And on this ship, gun in hand
Went the days
that I have spent.
This wood soaked tomb,
this smelly bog
Is where I'll surely die
I hear the scream
they know I'm near
Oh god!
Don't let them hear
my cries!'..
(just a suggestion, in how I would have tried to structure the pacing)
really enjoyed this scenes, especially liked how you added a deft touch to detail and context, enough
to keep us wondering and enticed.
thanks for sharing, dear poet..
(if this evolves into a more detailed short story, I would be intrigued to read some more, especially
if you were to play around with characterisation, I think that could a lot to your style
'in my humble opinion')
Hey thanks dude, you always give some really good insight
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