Unfinished

Makoto Maruyama

Early morning, no crowds 
White spirit 
Cold-blooded sky 
Is not red 
Shining berry much
No flutes, no grasses, no Champagnes,
No riots, 
“…no flowers, no leaves, no birds! –
November!”

  • Author: Makoto Maruyama (Offline Offline)
  • Published: November 7th, 2021 12:43
  • Category: Unclassified
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  • Users favorite of this poem: L. B. Mek
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  • L. B. Mek

    I would label this
    'an unruly: modern Tanka'..
    I love the sparse wording
    and its resulting, purposed brevity;
    in all of Japanese myth or lore
    'Bushido' is by far the most corrupted, in meaning
    by western 'lazy' translations;
    but, one of its most fundamental trait's
    (in my humble opinion)
    is to infuse a life, with meaningful yearning
    to seek perfection
    in that chosen 'way of Art': in their lives...
    and that's what is
    'illusively-Intimate'
    about works of poetry like yours, they speak
    to that yearning, that need
    to capture and eloquently word
    all: that you are aware-of
    and what little, you can observe
    with your eyes
    understand, with your mind
    and bravely Feel: with your heart!
    (thank you for choosing to share, dear poet
    this is such a unique Poetic treat)

    • Makoto Maruyama

      Thank you so much! I appreciate to your understanding about Japanese mind.

    • spilleronsheet

      Well crafted dear poet



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