Teddy.15

Sometimes

Sometimes

 

I completely forget

 

About missing you

 

Then...

 

In one single moment

 

You come to the surface

 

Of my lake

 

And

 

Once again, I drown.

 

 

Comments10

  • Goldfinch60

    May the drowning be drowned in love.

    Andy

    • Teddy.15

      Ah, the reader can decide this one dear Andy, 💖 thank you. X

    • orchidee

      Good write Teddy.
      Now I write:
      'Sometimes I sing; sometimes I don't
      Sometimes I got me teef in; sometimes not'.
      I do talk some rubbish - sometimes? Aww, why they say - Always! lol.

      • Teddy.15

        Sometimes! 🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣

      • Garth Rakumakoe

        So, so true Teddy! That's exactly how it happens when we're trying to stay afloat the surface the lake of longing. I love it!

        • Teddy.15

          Thank you dear Garth, this one can certainly be interpreted by each reader. Hugs my friend 🤗

        • Paul Bell

          Got a feeling this is the one who got away. There might have been others to take his place, but he's the one who lives inside your head. This is nice, yet painful too.

          • Teddy.15

            Not in real life Paul, actually for me this is about losing someone who died, but this one is also for the reader to decide, and I see many have their own idea, which is what I wanted, thank you dear Paul. 🤗🤗🤗🤗

            • Paul Bell

              Great stuff, that's what poetry is all about.

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            • dusk arising

              Wonderful. I'm a great fan of short poems. they pack a punch and yours today tells it like it is, no messing.

              • Teddy.15

                Good morning my dear Dusky, I guess I got lucky today, thank you my dear friend. I hope all's well in Dusky world. 💖💖💖

              • spilleronsheet

                So romantic Teddy
                If life allows to live this colour, I shall use your lines

                • Teddy.15

                  Dear Spills, so glad that this one touched you dear friend. Big hugs to you 🤗🤗🤗🤗 thank you so much.

                • Accidental Poet

                  Sometimes Teddy, the drowning is staying alive. 😉 Well penned my friend.

                  • Teddy.15

                    Yes it is my dear friend. Thank you. 💖

                  • Neil Higgins

                    We are always here ( go figure)
                    Verbal drowning can happen to anyone,be it good or bad.Its the "envelopment" of memories which keeps us/them alive.

                    • Teddy.15

                      For me this is about someone who is no longer here, thank you dear Neil. 🤗

                    • Neville



                      without any fear of contradiction, they just don't get much better than this x

                      • Teddy.15

                        I just got lucky, thank you dear Neville. 💖

                      • Jay-Lee Jane

                        Such a huge story, captured in only a few words! Fabulous write teddy!

                        • Teddy.15

                          Hello dear Jay-Lee-Jane, thank you I'm honoured you have enjoyed this. ❤️



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