Unfathomed.
Undousable light starts with chorused
outburst announcing through water
dark's first penetration.
Searching for force morning's order
means night-time's withdrawal
from dawn orchestration.
Arises now wonder when warmth
striates colour over horizon for
sun infiltration.
Awed by nature's unfathomed control
earthlings think laws, tho' unknown,
deserve admiration.
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Author:
Fay Slimm. (
Offline) - Published: November 24th, 2021 06:46
- Comment from author about the poem: Playing with words after watching the dawn. - hope you enjoy.
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Admire... I'm in awe at the dawn's unique beauty each day (when I get to see it) and you are right to embroider the event with subtle colourful descriptors for the sun invades and swipes away the dark with a steadfast all powerful wave of warm energy coming to our eyes through whatever the night's climate has left us.
Cool calculated drama rides your words today.
Your generous addition to my few stanzas fills me with delight for you and I see the same scenes of nature's beauty with poetic eye and try writing its praises - - thank you dear Dusky - - most sincerely for this lovely comment.
if this is what you call playing with words, then I would dearly love to see an example of something when you have really gone to town on it ... the word superb is apt but something of an understatement .... x
To be honest mon ami I was "playing" for hours to get the right balance of rhythmic phrasing. Hugs for your charming review that as usual lifts and warms my heart.........x
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