Fay Slimm.

Unfathomed

 

Unfathomed.

 

Undousable light starts with chorused

outburst announcing through water

dark's first penetration.

 

Searching for force morning's order 

means night-time's withdrawal  

 from dawn orchestration.

 

Arises now wonder when warmth

striates colour over horizon for

sun infiltration.

 

Awed by nature's unfathomed control

earthlings think laws, tho' unknown, 

deserve admiration.

 

Comments4

  • dusk arising

    Admire... I'm in awe at the dawn's unique beauty each day (when I get to see it) and you are right to embroider the event with subtle colourful descriptors for the sun invades and swipes away the dark with a steadfast all powerful wave of warm energy coming to our eyes through whatever the night's climate has left us.

    Cool calculated drama rides your words today.

    • Fay Slimm.

      Your generous addition to my few stanzas fills me with delight for you and I see the same scenes of nature's beauty with poetic eye and try writing its praises - - thank you dear Dusky - - most sincerely for this lovely comment.

    • Neville


      if this is what you call playing with words, then I would dearly love to see an example of something when you have really gone to town on it ... the word superb is apt but something of an understatement .... x

      • Fay Slimm.

        To be honest mon ami I was "playing" for hours to get the right balance of rhythmic phrasing. Hugs for your charming review that as usual lifts and warms my heart.........x

      • Robert Haigh

        We should rightly be in awe of nature and her many wonders. A beautifully expressed poem, Fay!

        • Fay Slimm.

          Oh how I agree with your feelings dear Robert - -- much appreciated too for wonder and awe are the right words where nature's concerned

        • Neil Higgins

          Dawn's beauty is a joy to behold.A lovely poem Fay.
          Cycles off stage and does a wheelie 😳

          • Fay Slimm.

            Yes a real joy to behold is dawn's early show and so is the sunset too dear friend - - smiles galore cos I had to read twice what you did off stage - - (thought at first glance you wrote wee-wee )

            • Neil Higgins

              🤭



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