So Ready.
Breath heaves in hopeful sighs below
night's gauzy-clad gown
to unveil potent dreams drenched in
desired clandestine.
Primed silken sheets of long-scented
waiting become creased
in untasted delight as sleep denies
will on dark's lone pyre.
Aches vibrate in-ward as soundless
restraint starts to drown
while threads of love's almost-made
wings shatter in flight.
Thrown is fanciful wish on wanton
sea as it sinks down
into crushed pillows that sewn for
yield feel but cold fire.
Can need stay submerged forever
in love's heady mist
before suffocating when so ready
but never been kissed ?
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Author:
Fay Slimm. (
Offline) - Published: April 12th, 2022 01:33
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Really sensitive depiction of that inner self "us" we all relax with as we fall to slumber when ideals succumb to need and desire cries to be sated.
Could only be written by one with a deep understanding of self and profound mastery of the word.
A 'must have' for my favourites.
Many thanks Dusk for considering the piece for your list of faves - - yes as you comment here an inner self comes to the fore when sleep fails to dull heartaches and awakens the need to be sated.......... I love your take on the piece .
Good write Fay.
Thank you dear Orchi.
Good one,take care
Thanks for dropping by Dean for a read of So Ready and good that you liked it.
'Can need stay submerged forever'
it remains, a glance away
from that forever being shattered
and yet still
a nervous, flushed face
withdrawal
from ensuring, our choices
make it last, forever
as an obstacle to our awaiting
happiness..
(just a beautiful crystallisation of feelings
few dare, to try and acknowledge
let alone
own, with pride
and share, within such accessibly
brave words
thank you, dear Fay)
You sum up so well my effort to word heartache in this reflective take on lonely love - thank you dear friend - - and so glad you found the versing accessibly brave
I love this poem! The last stanza was truly amazing.....all in all a fabulous poem, thanks so much for sharing!
I guessed you would relate to the theme of love dear Christina - -- sad that at times love comes to one party only and that was what I tried to portray - - so pleased you found the read enjoyable.
this is nothing short of spleniferous 🙂 x
Fankin' you masses mon ami for that superiferic description of my take on So Ready - - - ( now try saying my word three times and fast )..................x
Cries from the inner self rise up in the twilight of sleep. Moments are envisioned or remembered. The mind succumbs to the deepest desires.
Wow! A great write Fay. The strongest desires of the unkissed, exposed. Loved it. - Phil A.
Ah - you do make my day by your encouraging comments Phil - - - delighted the read of So Ready pleased your taste. Good to see you here again and hope all is well in your neck of the woods.
Another great write. Wonderful lines.
Love a beautiful sight… a scenery so hard to describe..so elegantly paced the love within ourselves that lay…well inked dear Fay
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