There are many blue flowers,
that I’d like to pick.
Go traveling to make progress,
but don’t be too quick !
A blue flower with a beautiful root,
that I’d love to pick.
But be patient with your foot,
or you’ll risk it to kick !
And the blue flower,
the one I would have picked,
cannot be picked after it got kicked.
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Author:
languale (
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- Comment from author about the poem: The blue flower represents your biggest dreams that you are determined to achieve. You should invest time in it, but try not to hurry too much, you will only put yourself under too much pressure. The beautiful root of the flower shows that there is a lot of work behind a dream and that you cannot achieve it overnight. You have to be patient, otherwise you ruin the whole thing for yourself; the flower cannot be picked after it got kicked. If you have questions, let me know! Feel free to express your opinion on this topic in the comments. :)
- Category: Reflection
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Very nice languale. I particularly like the final line. You have a gift.
That's very nice, thank you for commenting! I like to work with rhymes 🙂
Wonderful first poem you have submitted,your comments are bang on,thanks for sharing and reminding us to follow our dreams,poet on.
Thank you for commenting.
I absolutely love the reflection in this poem. A beautiful read!🍀
Thank you very much, i put a lot of work into it.
Do you plan on writing more like this?
Blue is a beautiful colour. Using it to describe one's dream is also nice.
Good write L.
Nope, that's not me looking in for many of those 28 views (the last time I looked in!) lol.
I quite like your poem. It has a great metaphor, and you used it well to get your point across to the audience. Well done!
Loved the imagery you have applied! And the line where you say don’t be too quick shows that success comes slow and to stay patient. Loved the message and the style!
Beautiful imagery, the metaphor for dreams was absolutely amazing and I really liked reading this. it makes me wanna follow my dreams or at least figure out what I want my life to be like
very synchronous moment you recommending me read this. i've been reading the instigating agent for a while now and can't seem to stop thinking about dreams.
anyway, i love your form and i'd love to see a better resolution to this!! not knocking it at all, but you could definitely do more with this concept and i'd love to see it. will be following you to see what you do.
I enjoyed your poem L. Great job with imagery and flow. Great choice of color as well. 😊
(such beautiful imagery
a wonderfully realised poem
brilliantly, anchored
and built around that 'blue flower'
metaphor
or dream symbolism..
thanks for sharing)
but
some flowers are sturdy
even after being trampled
they still fight
their way, back up
you'll see them
circling themselves around
leaning, on a sturdy frame
all they need, is a chance
or a helping hand
the rest, they'll do themselves..
we need only, keep believing
in them...!
(dear poet, just fyi
Please note, you need not comment
on any of my scribbles
for me
to comment on your poetry
if I see it
and feel like it, i will comment
at every opportunity, I promise
most of us here at MPS
don't have
a 'quid pro quo', culture)
Beautiful. The symbolism is meaningful. Thank you for writing this!
You have a lot of potential!! Thank you so much for writing this. I enjoy reading poems with a deeper, symbolic meaning, and this one takes the cake. The layers of depth are wonderful. Thanks for telling me to check it out- it was definitely a beautifully written, enjoyable read.
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