I’m floating
I don’t know why I am floating
Or how I am floating
So I look down
Below I see a room
A boy sits below me
Blankly staring at the wall that faces him
Does he know I’m there?
And on the wall, there’s a flag
It’s got 6 colours on it
Red
Orange
Yellow
Green
Blue
Violet
And there’s a poster on the wall
It’s got one colour on it
White
And there are lines on the boy’s arm
Lines of a life too great a burden for the boy
And he doesn’t want to leave the room I think
Because he’s just sitting there
With the flag
And the poster
And the lines
Im falling
I’m falling and I’m scared
I’m scared because I don’t want to hurt the boy
He looks peaceful
I’m in the room
With the flag
Red
Orange
Yellow
Green
Blue
Violet
With the poster
White
And the boy is gone
And I’m there instead
With the flag
And the poster
And the lines
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Author:
H (Pseudonym) (
Offline) - Published: June 6th, 2022 08:37
- Comment from author about the poem: this poem is the first in a series of 5 poems called ' the numbers project'. They centre around mental health and emotion
- Category: Sad
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Comments2
I really like the complex emotions and simplicity to this peice. The repetition with the colours is really affective and sticks with you really well. the part about the lines on the person and the line 'a life too great a burden for the boy' was fantastic and held so much emotion in such few lines. Thats so cool!!! Continuing, I love how the changed repetition conveys uncertainty, confusion and fear by the ghost? towards the boy. Over all, this is a really good poem, and with simple words tells so much.
well that nearly made me cry
idk why tho maybe bc im high on sleep deprivation 😛
or bc its so good lmao
i love the symbolism and the repetition of the colours is effective bc u haven't overdone it
sorry if that made no sense its nearly 2am here
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