the harder they fall
the bigger they were
big as the sun
and shone like one
doesn’t matter where
where we’ve been
doesn’t matter why
doesn’t matter when
i know that we’re broken
guess i was hoping
we would just keep going
but the feeling has faded
no sense in waiting
for you to come to yours
the harder they fall
the bigger they are
like a fucking freight train
hitting a car
doesn’t matter how you spin it
which way you tilt it
the china’s still broken
and that’s just who we are
and i could convince you
but the truth is since you
left i’ve been a sickening wreck
and maybe it’s true
once the world hits you
you don’t get up again
the bigger they are
the harder they fall
so can you please tell me
why i´m feeling so small?
because i fell so deep
and it felt so true
but now that it’s gone
there´s nothing i can do
i’m looking down through
the memories play over
up and down of you
on this rollercoaster
and though i may deny it
it’s so hard to fight it
this feeling i’ll ride it
all through the night
and i’m okay
i’m doing just fine
but the truth is an agony
like all the damn time
well the harder they fall
the bigger they were
as bright as the moon
and shone like it too
and the bigger they are
the harder they fall…
fighting the urge…
to pick up the phone…
and make…
one…
final…
call.
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Author:
noah (Pseudonym) (
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- Comment from author about the poem: Original posted here, by a thousand wishes: https://mypoeticside.com/show-poem-147849 Credit goes 100% to her, and any contributions or changes to the structure I made are owed to her writing it in the first place. These are her words!! To reveal a little about how I write, I talk through everything before pen hits paper. If there's no melody to follow, there isn't a verse. So please appreciate that this is simply my spin on someone else's work as I talked myself through it. Hope you like it atw!!
- Category: Reflection
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- Users favorite of this poem: a thousand wishes, geekslutnerdgirl, JudyStella.
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Comments4
WOW. You were modest when you said ¨level 3¨ this is like level 100. My favorite part is the ¨up and down of you on this rollercoaster¨ You truly took my first version and made it 100x better
And you should take some of the credit 🙂 you made it so much more beautiful
I'm very glad you like it but as far as I'm concerned I'm just an editor 🙂
Pls, that's the understatement of the year
Hi both of you! Actually enjoyed both versions! I like GON statement about melody and verse, agree with rhat. I’m very agreeable this morning! You two should do a few collaborations, you have talent, both of you!
Great minds think alike! Love the theme, structure and how the feelings are penned so well!
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