The red-eyed raven

a thousand wishes

I sleep without dreams 

and I dream without sleep 

I toss and I turn 

I read and I weep 

 

I open my eyes

I see oceans that run deep

Mountains that are steep

but still, I cant sleep

 

Staying awake?

breeds nothing but defeat

and yet when I close my eyes

there´s a reaper I meet

She´s a sight for sore eyes

She tells me pretty lies

 

A devil, with no disguise

but I´m not surprised

when I saw her red eyes

I knew 

 

My deprivation gives me in return 

a sweet sensation

a beautiful, red-eyed, gleaming raven

 

 

  • Author: a thousand wishes (Offline Offline)
  • Published: June 8th, 2022 10:47
  • Category: Surrealist
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  • User favorite of this poem: GON.
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Comments3

  • GON

    This is actually my favorite of yours so far. The form is great, the images you call are interesting, and the rhymes are mostly tasteful. Very cool!

    • a thousand wishes

      mostly? continue

      • GON

        Ok, there are a couple of lines that stand out to me as rhyming for the sake of rhyming itself and don't take the poem anywhere narratively. For example, deep oceans and steep mountains might have an associative tie-in to your concept, however, those lines are followed by the re-tread on not being able to get sleep that you established in the first stanza. That kind of leads into the third stanza at the same place you led into the second one with.

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      • hzugman

        Very nice poem 1000. What a coincidence that with both wrote poems on the dream theme.

      • JudyStella

        I love the structure and the symbols used! Good one!



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