he asked if i had everything
i said, "i do"
with a strawberry smile
i waited desperately for him to tease
"ooooh did we just get married"
like the way elementary kids did
when the teacher was on the phone
but i watched him
watched him hit me with a "see ya"
and turn around
faster than a blink
because if he blinked
salt would engulf the bittersweet taste inside his mouth
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Author:
lovebrigita (
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- Comment from author about the poem: i've always wanted to include the reference to elementary kids "ooooh"ing at the teacher's responses on the phone - almost seems like the peak of innocence to me.
- Category: Love
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Comments1
I am always drawn to words
that utilise, children's
unique, perspectives
to emphasise the distance between
who we used to be
who we thought we would become
and who we are..
(a little like
our ideal of love...
we see, Spring
till we see Winter
the in-between seasons
we're too stubborn: to heed..)
succinct poetry, with a lot of depth
so much to unravel
and consider
I really like your 'matter of fact' style
while still, utilising poetry's expressive artistry..
thanks for sharing!
thank you so much for your kind words! i agree - it is certainly so interesting to see things through children's perspectives. thank you for reading!
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