We cannot read the minds of those so close,
Or feel the deep emotion
You may as well be comatose
Your mind Is like the ocean
So deep I cannot reach you
So big that I am lost
So dark I cannot see through
Yet in the swells I’m tossed
I need to find an island
Where our minds can meet
Build sandcastles in the sand
Sweep you off your feet
You always keep a distance
It’s pulling at my heart
It’s like your living in a trance
Keeping us apart
Don’t you know I need to,
I need to keep you near
To know everything about you
You are all that I hold dear
I would go to any length
Go that extra mile
Where do you find that strength
To deny me your smile?
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Author:
Tallisman (Pseudonym) (
Offline) - Published: July 29th, 2022 00:47
- Comment from author about the poem: Some months ago I had a crisis in confidence and pulled a lot of my poems down. I’m not sure why, but I am putting some of them back up, so apologies if you have read this before!
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Comments5
For me, a poet's personal sensitivites showing through in the poetry they write is what makes the difference between a game played with words and meaningful poetry. We have to be sensitive beasts to communicate on a certain level through our craft which does, of course, have it's downsides just as you point out. I know only too well about periods where all i can do is look back through my old stuff and re-post it because inspiration or confidence has wained when it comes to creating new stuff.
But, if it was a good read first time around then it still is in my book.
I thank you!
anything that comes easy
lacks, that endurance to last
I have found in life, ergo
if it takes you going back n forth
a hundred times
to feel, like you're in the right
frame of mind, to voice yourself
and your art
as best you can.. then that's perfectly fine!
in-fact, it makes your work
that much more precious
thank you! for choosing to share
but don't struggle alone
make a community with those you trust
let them ease the weight of your
struggles, if you need them
stay Strong! dear cherished Poet
write for yourself, fck anyone else
without you
these works would never have existed
take comfort in that!
'Where *our* minds can meet
Build sandcastles in the sand
Sweep you off your feet
You always keep a distance
It’s pulling at my heart
It’s like your living in a trance'
Thanks LB, and for the correction….now done!
Feel proud of your poems, especially if they are like this one! Such a vividly expressed art here, I really enjoyed the flow and rhythm you have going on. Thanks for posting this to share with us once more!
Thankyou, much appreciated!
Very deep and emotional! Brought a lump to my throat.
Glad you enjoyed it!
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