Incomplete Verses

thinkerbell

I was drowning

Drowning in the stifling air of the night

 

As I fought back tears

And lay gasping for breath 

 

As starlit dreams flashed before my eyes

And I felt myself sinking into the darkness of oblivion

 

I painted our verses on the skies

Alas! I couldn't rewrite our stars

  • Author: Poetic persona (Pseudonym) (Offline Offline)
  • Published: August 3rd, 2022 10:45
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  • Bella Shepard

    So poignantly written, lovely verse!

  • thinkerbell

    Thank you dear poet🥰

  • KRWonder

    Stunning words that paint such vivid images. This is a lovely, reminiscent work, I enjoyed reading it. Thanks for sharing!

  • thinkerbell

    Thank you dear poet🥰

  • L. B. Mek

    thanks for sharing a really interesting read
    an issue written relatable and accessible..
    if any of the below makes sense to you, that's great
    if not kindly forgive my over opinionated, foolish tangent..
    (it is impossible, to try and play
    a game of chance with fate
    since, our circumstances
    will have already been chosen for us
    at any time..
    but, we can pick from the options
    before us
    there are always options
    and I think what wisdom represents
    is having the experience and calmness
    to see all the available options available
    at any one time..
    that way, when we look up at the stars
    instead of looking to change them
    we'll be looking to find the answers
    they have waiting for us
    even if they may be the harsh ones
    this time round
    leading us, to the better answers
    later on in life
    we hope!)

  • thinkerbell

    Yeah what you have written makes perfect sense...and I love your interpretation of the poem..even I had thoughts along those lines when I wrote the verses about looking up at stars...🥰🥰



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