I was drowning
Drowning in the stifling air of the night
As I fought back tears
And lay gasping for breath
As starlit dreams flashed before my eyes
And I felt myself sinking into the darkness of oblivion
I painted our verses on the skies
Alas! I couldn't rewrite our stars
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So poignantly written, lovely verse!
Thank you dear poet🥰
Stunning words that paint such vivid images. This is a lovely, reminiscent work, I enjoyed reading it. Thanks for sharing!
Thank you dear poet🥰
thanks for sharing a really interesting read
an issue written relatable and accessible..
if any of the below makes sense to you, that's great
if not kindly forgive my over opinionated, foolish tangent..
(it is impossible, to try and play
a game of chance with fate
since, our circumstances
will have already been chosen for us
at any time..
but, we can pick from the options
before us
there are always options
and I think what wisdom represents
is having the experience and calmness
to see all the available options available
at any one time..
that way, when we look up at the stars
instead of looking to change them
we'll be looking to find the answers
they have waiting for us
even if they may be the harsh ones
this time round
leading us, to the better answers
later on in life
we hope!)
Yeah what you have written makes perfect sense...and I love your interpretation of the poem..even I had thoughts along those lines when I wrote the verses about looking up at stars...🥰🥰
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