My eyesight grows dim
Yet I see better than ever before
Everything broken now fits
In universal harmony
My body is weak
But is carried by my soul
To the beginning of time
And the end of eternity
Though this form will end
I will see you again
In the sun and the wind
And until then my friend
My place will be taken by my love
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Author:
sorenbarrett (
Offline) - Published: September 6th, 2022 06:31
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Comments2
I love this piece. I wish I had written it!, Goes into my favs for sure
Thank you so much Dusk for your kind remarks. I wanted to add more but decided that less is more.
youre right, less is more. Let your reader fill in 'spaces' or 'places' with their own thoughts.... it's what we poets seem to have plenty of so why not LOL
You have captured so beautifully the journey of the body and the soul. This is a poem to contemplate, over and over. A superb write and a fav.
Thank you, Bella it means a lot, your comments. I appreciate your most gracious remarks.
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