A beautiful dream like image of memories and the presence. So well worded that it hypnotizes and bears one on a journey, carried in the arms of Morpheus. The cycle of life is beautiful. I love the line "revive severed umbilical dreams"
Phew! This is something like a 9.2.9.2. format. Or if not that, it comes under 'irregular' format!
I've tackled a 14.14.4.7.8. format before. I split the 14's into 8.6's. heehee.
Sounds like I'm playing Bingo here! lol.
I could of course try & be clever and pen something profound .. but shall resist and just say this is an excellent bit o poetry CB and no kiddin sir ..... Neville
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A beautiful dream like image of memories and the presence. So well worded that it hypnotizes and bears one on a journey, carried in the arms of Morpheus. The cycle of life is beautiful. I love the line "revive severed umbilical dreams"
Thanks Soren. Yes, makes one think of someone's dreams depending on who was severed from whom and what.
Phew! This is something like a 9.2.9.2. format. Or if not that, it comes under 'irregular' format!
I've tackled a 14.14.4.7.8. format before. I split the 14's into 8.6's. heehee.
Sounds like I'm playing Bingo here! lol.
Bingo! Fun with a good crowd and a slew of winnings!
I feel past, present and future converge, to beguile and entreat. So well done!
Thanks Bella. Glad this convergence was evident.
I could of course try & be clever and pen something profound .. but shall resist and just say this is an excellent bit o poetry CB and no kiddin sir ..... Neville
Perhaps after this polite acknowledgement you could give a bit of that wit in response. For a bit of fun!
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