The Small Space


The small space

     of a lover's eye

A bed of hay

    on which to die


A desert waste

     from sea to sea

A journey sure

     to finish me


The walled garden

     of my lover's heart

The vain glory 

     of my petty art


A molting grackle

     in the rain

A screech, a shiver,

     a shower of shame

  • Author: jarcher54 (Offline Offline)
  • Published: February 7th, 2023 02:12
  • Comment from author about the poem: Musings on loneliness
  • Category: Unclassified
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  • Neville

    my word, you muse so very well .. like fine art, this is near priceless .. N

    • jarcher54

      As usual the most interesting things for me sort of write themselves. Thanks for opening this humble link.

    • Doggerel Dave

      We all must sort this in our own way... In the meantime you've wrought a delicate thing which notes without becoming maudilin.

      • jarcher54

        Thank you Dave. I'm not particularly lonesome or hopeless... it's a human state we can all meditate on for others if not for ourselves. I can be lonesome if I really try!

        • Doggerel Dave

          Wouldn't have thought you were, jarch.
          I enjoy your contributions when I come across them - Stay here, won't you?

        • hzugman

          Well done J.
          BTW your art ain't petty.

          • jarcher54

            Thank you for your kindness. I love composing and making little watercolors, but I am extremely busy at work. Retirement is calling!!

          • Parisab

            The loneliness is everywhere in the empty spaces your poem holds. How beautiful!

            • jarcher54

              Thank you kind lady. This one was almost more about sound than meaning.

            • sorenbarrett

              I loved the pairings. Subtle yet to the point. A bit melancholic but also nostalgic in a way. Very nice

              • jarcher54

                Yes they aren't directly related but they all worked together in my pea brain! Thank you!!

              • Quemis

                I know it is well made,
                As It made me sad.

                Very to the point.
                Fitting watercolor too.

              • Kinsley Lee

                Hi! Thank you for your sharing your poem. Your poem has something and it impressed me. Thank you so much!

              • hzugman

                Nicely done, J54. I read it again.

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