it was a sugar rush
my candyfloss heart; it was on a sugar rush
the sickly sweet smell entranced me so
like a fly is drawn to honey
he kept me close
told me pretty lies, sweet nothings
they tasted like pure sugar on my tongue
his venomous words dripped of honey
straight from the comb
he spun tall tales with the elegance of
a fairy-floss machine at the fair
fabricated love, spun to perfection
how addictive this intoxicating game became
and i am still amazed by how
quickly the candyfloss melted away
how the pink bubblegum turned gray
lost its flavor, bitter in my mouth
i hate this aftertaste
you were addictive and poisonous yet
i saw no warnings from the FDA
no red flags, no skull & crossbones
how did i not see this coming?
why did no one warn me till it was too late?
society told me
to keep my distance from bottles and stay off of pills
that puffs of smoke could kill
and i listened, i obeyed
but darling, no one warned me about you
no one warned me about what this damned sugar rush could do
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Author:
scarletttt (
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- Category: Love
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Comments4
very much enjoyed ma'am & welcome to MPS ..
Thank you!
You encapsulated perfectly how love sometimes be a drug that no one warns you about and also the worst one. Our broken heart is at the mercy of twisted societal concepts which makes it incredibly hard to heal. Amazing!!
exactly was i was trying to portray!
things seem so blissful and enticing, so people stumble around blindly with their hearts on their sleeves. but people are not always what they appear!
This was very beautiful, I loved how you chose a subject to present the emotions and enraptured the reader through your writing. Amazing.
tysm! that means a lot coming from another writer.
I really like what the poem represents. it represents not only the blinding state of love but how so much is blinding in general. It also in a way shows the flaws of society and how they fail to warn us of so much. I loved the way you described these emotions and how much more emotion you put in your poem.
thank you, the idea i tried to represent was how deceiving people can be, and how flawed society is for presenting us with these very unrealistic ideas, of, well, love!
but in this picture-perfect ideal of love, the hopeless romantic is lost!
you also put so much emotion into your writing, and i love it:))
I definitely agree with society presenting us with unrealistic ideas of love. But I also feel that almost everything that society portrays is unrealistic ideas and these beliefs cause many negative emotions. Also thank you for the comment on my writing.
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