In the morning the dew forms
The air begins to warm
There is a slight fog
Flowers bloom and sun shines
In the hospital a man lays in wait
Waiting for the doctor to give him news
The doctor walks in with a grim look
The man will not make it past this cancer
Outside children play basketball
This is their first chance to do so in the warmth
The court is moist and the net is ripped
A boy shoots the ball
The streets are packed with cars
People on their way to work
Exhaust fumes pumped into the air
As the machine in the hospital flatlines
The ball goes into the hoop.
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Author:
MysteryGhost (
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A great pairing of elements and the metaphor of the children's last cfhance for warm weather makes a lot of sense. It ends well with the ball through the hoop. It can mean the end of the game either way but it is positive in that points are scored. Well done
Thanks! I had originally made this poem for an english project but it was so good I wanted to publish it. Glad you like it!
Outside it is a sunny springtime day with children playing. Inside the hospital the mood is dark and grim as a man lies dying. A great contrast and ending. enjoyed your poem. - Phil A.
Thanks for reading! I made it like that to show how one thing can be great for someone and horrible for another. Glad you enjoyed it!
a fine, but clearly very sad observation on what might otherwise be, just another sunny spring day .. 🖤
Thank you so much for reading!
I like your poem when you describe the death of the patient and the comparison to the young boys basketball. It is very real and from the heart. The ending was happy metaphorically speaking when the ball gets into the hoop. great poem all the best Micalina
Thanks for reading! Glad you enjoyed it!
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